I've been trying to figure out
what it is that makes me so in love with you.
I don't think it's the walks,
the chinese food,
or the rainy days we spent inside
together.
[God, I miss those times.]
And I definitely know that
it's not the time we spend separated.
But you,
You've sunken down into the deepest,
most sacred spaces of me.
I've found one more reason to live;
death doesn't seem such a priority anymore.
So far in touch with what I am now,
I've forgotten what I'm not.
Because the only thing I'm not now
is alone.
Author notes
Ash-er-mah-leigh.
I guess it's easy to tell where my inspiration came from. I had a quote to go with my picture:
"There are only four questions of value in life, Don Octavio.
What is sacred? Of what is the spirit made?
What is worth living for, and what is worth dying for?
The answer to each of these is the same: only love."
So yeah. I was inspired by the last three lines. I've never seen the movie... but it sounds sweet. Lol.
My guess for the first bonus is that you love Johnny Depp and you're a fan of his movies.
For the second bonus... I tried to include the same excitement and wonder that she had toward her subject. I also mentioned a thunderstorm/ rain in my poem.
A contest entry
- The Random Rounds - Round 7 by Frodofan.
1670 points, ended September 19, 2007, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I want to be known for my hits, not just my misses...
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It's Gonna Be a Long Haul, Baby, But I'm Down for the Ride by Ash-er-mah-leigh
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It's Gonna Be a Long Haul, Baby, But I'm Down for the Ride by Ash-er-mah-leigh
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I liked that this was very personal sounding - very real. The title is a little long, though it does sort of sum up the entire poem.
Title - 9
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Form - 10
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Originality - 8
Reaction - 8
Rules - 10*
Makes sense - 10
Enjoyable - 7
And I guess I'll have to give you those two bonuses too!
that's an extra 30 points
total: 119
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Very loving and sweet.
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