You can be my Spiderman,
&& I’ll be that girl that's always in trouble.
I can fall from a tall building, just so you can catch me.
We can swing high over stars && leave each other breathless from kisses.
Let’s lay in love-note-clusted webs,
Under high-lighter blue skies.
Bodies entwined &&
Music playing.
One day you can take me to the world’s highest mountain.
&& I won’t feel the cold as long as you keep your eyes on me.
They burn through my heart and fingertips like hot marshmallows.
I’ll be your heat as long as you promise to be mine forever & a second.
I love it when you hang upside down,
&& I lift up the bottom of your delicate mask
&& We have a tonsil fight as our tongues twist and lock.
You’re Spiderman.
&& I’m the girl you saved.
Author notes
Spiderman is way sexyer than Superman :]
I want it to be short and sweet.
Hope you like x
Butterflykisses - You haven't read this one I hope!
iChewGlitter - x
A contest entry
- Spiderman by TheD.O.C..
300 points, ended October 20, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ROUND 1; Perfect Prewrites by They Say Shannon.
450 points, ended September 17, 2007, 41 entries
Honorable mention
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Please tell me what you think
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Damn.. this is awesome!
I was a little thrown off
by the crazy cool
but swindlin'!
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aw thats so cute!
i love it♥
and yea spiderman is sexyer than superman haha
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I love it when you hang upside down,
&& I lift up the bottom of your delicate mask
&& We have a tonsil fight as our tongues twist and lock.
nice lines here dear poet
Riftkin -
"..forever and a second", I like that line
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"girl that always in trouble."
That's*
"I can fall from a tall building"
Should maybe it be 'will' rather than 'can'?
I don't know. I can't decide. Haha.
"We can swing high over stars && leave each other breathless from kisses."
Beautiful!
"Let’s lay in love-note-clusted webs,
Under high-lighter blue skies.
Bodies entwined &&
Music playing."
Oh god, I loved those lines!!!
Awe, this is so cute! Hahaha.
Thank you for entering darling, and no I hadn't read it yet!
I meant to but I got busy and was saving it and then you entered it and I was happy.
Thanks and good luck! < -
I like this poem.....its uplifting for me. Great write.
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Thank you :]
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LOL. This is cool. I like how you've thown your feeling in mixed with the fictious character. This is funny but serious at the same time. Great job and good luck in the contest.
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Had to read it...
I really enjoyed the descriptives you've used in this - very appropriate. What better color for a comic book hero's skies than highlighter-blue? Your fourth stanza is a favorite scene of artists and writers alike. Very well done.
Slyder
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Funny, sweet, and very well written,
great job here, and I like the fact that it's short and sweet.
Bravo,
Jin
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i like the highlighter blue sky... i think that's the first time I heard a sky described that way... but it was perfect for the visual you were trying to create. nice poem!
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"They burn through my heart and fingertips like hot marshmallows.
I’ll be your heat as long as you promise to be mine forever & a second."
Another great one babes!
Thank you for entering dollie,
This is ahmazing.
<3
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