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Empty Shell

Lost my mind, back in Bedlem
Lost my heart, long ago to you
Sold my soul to a passing devil
I'm an empty shell but what can I do?
Said goodbye, to the fires of friendship
Said hello, to sorrows tears
Peoples lives are intertwining
Paths may cross, throughout the years

Let me tell you a story
Bout a lass I used to know
Beaten by her husband, drank too much
But she never let it show
Well one day she was talkin
To a lad about my age
She said if I was only 15 again
Would you release me from this cage?
She said

Lost my mind, back in Bedlem
Lost my heart, long ago to you
Sold my soul to a passing devil
I'm an empty shell but what can I do?

Now this lad wasnt stupid
Impossible as that may seem
He said You've only met me twice before
It's too early in reality
He said

Say goodbye, to the fires of friendship
Say hello, to sorrows tears
Peoples lives are intertwining
Our paths may cross, in later years

Now recently I was walking
Down a street in my home town
The very same lad came up to me
He said hey, look what I've found
Now from my old friend I was different
I'd known him three years or more
So I plucked up the corage and I spoke my heart
I said you're the lad that I adore
I said

Lost my mind, back in Bedlem
Lost my heart, long ago to you
Sold my soul to a passing devil
I'm an empty shell but what can I do?
Said hello, to the fires of friendship
Said goodbye, to sorrows tears
Peoples lives are intertwining
Our paths have crossed, after all these years

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  • HereComesTheSun
    April 18

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    i love how this read and how you did a great job in the whole story and how you just let the words take over and you had such a lyrical piece too
    thanks for entering


  • MyMudPies
    September 30, 2008
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    nice write good luck in the contest


  • Cerbie20
    August 31, 2008

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    good job! this was a good poem!

    Say goodbye, to the fires of friendship
    Say hello, to sorrows tears
    Peoples lives are intertwining
    Our paths may cross, in later years

    i really like this stanza. the last line makes it seem like maybe hope, just maybe


  • nobodys-girl
    March 29, 2008

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    i love this. i can't even explain how this touched me. i am at the point in my life where i am questioning the people in my life and why they are there. not in a bad way. thankyou so much for entering my contest and best of luck!


  • joannablue
    March 29, 2008

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    I am very impressed with your entry even though it's a bit sad, it reads like a song. Peoples lives do cross many times, I'm a firm believer in that, we are meant to meet certain people in this life.
    Great poem.
    Thank you for entering my contest.
    Joanna

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