Inner self
Deep in thought
Always there
Never bought
Decisions placed upon the shelf
A contest entry
- Short and meaningful by tender-butterfly.
470 points, ended September 26, 2007, 17 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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Nice
First of all thank you for the entry.
What else can I say... You really followed through with my rules and created a great write...
Well done and all the best to you.
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Fantastic, fast, to the point!! Woohoo
Great job, has alot of energy, something I crave.
Jin
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Good
This was short and very deep in a limited view that shows a possibility of greater development and meaning. Emotionally the poem emits a kinds od static resounding resonesce that links to certain personal real-life realities.
That said the format is definately short and quite meaningful but the last line does not quite fit as well as the first, which flows well; essenially it breaks abit near the end.
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Can they??? I dont think so,
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I'm not sure if I like that last line as that did bring this whole new imagery of bookshelfs but I guess it can do very deep anways
The inner thoughts somehoe become enemies when we can't make a decision if they are with us or not and then they seem to seperate when we must decide on the decision itself. Almost like talking against the mirror when either one well copy -
I like this... It's so simplistic, yet breath taking. In so little words, it says it all. Great write.
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