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Relics and Ruins

Beneath roiling hazy skies
raging winds reverberate
endlessly the windmills turn
blown by toxins that sealed fate

Vast oceans storm and surge
upon ruins now submerged
not a creature makes a sound
but there's machines to be heard

Though relics from the past
running computerized commands
the answers came to late
for a species once called man

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  • pain is love.
    June 13

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    Beneath roiling hazy skies
    raging winds reverberate
    endlessly the windmills turn
    blown by toxins that sealed fate

    Thank you for an amazing write!


  • galfalfa gold member
    September 12, 2007

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    Imagine the garbage we'll leave behind...no one who studies the earth like we do Mars will have to wonder if there was once life on this planet.
    I could envision this Rob, perfectly penned!


    galfalfa

    • faderman1959
      September 12, 2007
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      Thanks gal! They will know there was life on this planet for sure. They will wonder how pathetic we were to leave it the way we did!


  • PoetryBabe18
    September 11, 2007
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    Very interesting..Sometimes the shortest poems are the ones most enjoyed. Good Job.

    • faderman1959
      September 12, 2007
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      PoetryBabe thank you so much for commenting! I truly appreciate it! I wasted 200 pts on other people who clicked and left no comment. You made my day!


  • Sandygram
    September 11, 2007

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    Wonderful Write!!!

    Hi Rob, so glad you wrote a poem. Well your bleak look into our future may well prove to be true my friend. I am so amazed how the computer works around the world, I am sure it is of the devil. It is very eerie when I think back just 100 years ago and then look at where we are today. It is not natural to me, not any of all this.
    Great poem my friend. Flowed very well and had great imagery in your message. You take care. Sandy

    • faderman1959
      September 11, 2007

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      Thanks sandy! I think nature is going to teach us a lesson because of our arrogance. things are changing so fast with no thought of the consequences.

      • Sandygram
        September 11, 2007
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        I do agree. Things are just getting worse as each year passes. Great poem!!! Made me think, I hope it does some others too. God Bless my friend.

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