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Stolen sighs





 

It was late at night,

                    (or so)

 

we folded and furled,

and tussled

with bed linen...

 

       Then,

       our moment;

 

surroundings shushed climaxes

as if suspense stole sighs,

skulking in the shadows

of our silhouettes.

 

       Pantingly,

       we unplugged;

 

and syllables of sensuality

translated to slumber.

                    (and your lovely snore)

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Poetical porn...

Yes, my boyfriend snores - Quite annoying actually but... I'd miss it if he wouldn't do it anymore.


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  • Rose Angel gold member
    June 24, 2008

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    All the buildup and then the humour...Quite effective, very effectively different..A thoughtful write!


  • esroddo silver member
    January 14, 2008

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    I loved it

    It really maked me smile at the end, and was very intrigued in the beginning.
    Very sensual words that you used to express your night. LISA


  • Lute
    December 27, 2007

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    content 7.3
    vocabulary 9.7
    accuracy 7.8
    creativity 7.3
    theme 7
    originality 7.2

    totals-46.3


  • zochit2me gold member
    December 23, 2007

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    Wonderful metaphors.
    Congrats on bronze.

    A sigh poem indeed

    Becky


  • Naridill gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    I think I have been a little bias loving this piece. It reminds me so much of what the simple beauty in life is. The annoyance of the human condition but how it reflects as something we need.
    A very captivating piece that I adore.
    Thanks for entering
    and much luck.


  • Daizy21
    November 27, 2007
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    This is truely a poem of deep love...thank you for entering and good luck!


  • In Too Deep1
    November 23, 2007

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    Lol.. a unique writ indeed. It is astounding at what we remember about one another, and how odd the times that those memories surface.. often causing a canting smile when we need it most. It is said that a lovers soul will not rest until it has been lulled. Great sex does that. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the comp


  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 23, 2007

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    I like the different approach you have taken with this. It is a great write indeed. My children tell me I snore, but I strongly deny that Good luck in the contest


  • Mildew in PinK tile
    November 23, 2007
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    hm this was an interesting approach. loved how it wasnt all cliche.
    sn in authors note please


  • esroddo silver member
    November 20, 2007
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    Wonderful sensual write.

    It had to be good sex to wipe him out. hehehe. Wonderful write full of details. LISA


  • leslielovesthomas
    October 25, 2007

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    love it!! so does mine and i would be weird if he didn't do it. great piece and good luck!!!

    leslie


  • chills gold member
    October 24, 2007

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    so, even if they are with a man, men still roll over and snore after love?? Thank heavens - I thought it was me................ another three clapper darling


  • Glasyalabolas
    October 23, 2007

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    I like the wording in this piece, sensual but fun. Unplugged was an unexpected word to see, but it works well.

    Good write.


  • daviscth silver member
    October 23, 2007

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    What a delightful piece of work!!!

    It reads as smooth as satin sheets sliding from the skin.

    I enjoyed it very much!!


  • Mezclita
    October 20, 2007

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    "as if suspense stole sighs,
    skulking in the shadows"... don't know why but i think that sounds sadly powerful... hmmm... & the end's so cute! lol


  • Celticmoon
    October 4, 2007

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    This is in no way porn or any kind! This is sensual loving perfection. It holds a soft delicate touch that should be incorporated into this type of writing. I love this piece! The metaphors are wonderful but then from you I would expect no less. You leave me to envy your talent every time. Thank you for entering and good luck!


    Blessings
    Bel


  • Anna Emkah
    October 1, 2007

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    This is Beautiful - no porn at all... just lovely and sweet. I have to say it again: You are a very skilful poet. Hope to read more of such great artistic work soon. Good luck Leander. Anna.


  • luckynsincere
    September 25, 2007

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    OMG!!! You have not heard a snore until you have to hear the ungodly sounds that come from the hole in my boyfriends face...lololololol...

    this is actually a inspiring poem. Even the act of the snore was sensual and charming. You really did a fantasic job with this. Keep it up!

    Mel


  • Broken4you
    September 19, 2007

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    Wow Leander it has been a while since I read your poetry, I have to say though I've always loved the structure of your words. You are a unique writer..Great write.


  • Sara Bellem
    September 18, 2007

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    Aw, How sweet! I know what you mean, my fiancee (he will be my husband when we wed THIS friday! OMG! ) snores loudly, and it took me a couple of weeks of sleeping next to him to finally get use to it. One night he had to stay out late with his band and I couldn't sleep well because he wasn't snoring beside me Ah, I hope you remember me Leander because I sure have missed you Its so good to read your poetry again


  • Nicolette gold member
    September 14, 2007

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    I clicked on this poem earlier but then it was still in the making...thought I'd just check back on you! I like the plugging and unplugging here - and even the snores as it adds such a sense of reality to this poem. I know how it goes with snoring...one gets used to it (if it's not tooooo bad - like my brother-in-law's, lol) and when it's not there, you'll miss the origin of the snoring. Lovely sensual write, Leander

    ~ Nicolette


  • Laura
    September 13, 2007

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    wow this is brilliant i love the use of alliteration it certainly added imagery to this cleverly crafted masterpiece xx


  • Mari Goes gold member
    September 13, 2007

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    Poetical porn, laughing loud here!!!!
    Love is... to endure your partner snore without complaining

    This isn't porn schat, this is lovely and sensual. Did he read it yet?


    • leander Moderators member
      September 13, 2007
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      No he hasn't, I've just written in 5 minutes ago and I'm at work

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