As she sits watching the time tick by
No one’s around her to see her cry
To her side she see’s that well used tool
With stains from when she was called a fool
She can remember so clearly what each one is for
This one’s from when she was pushed to the floor
This one’s a reminder of the time she realised
That no one really cared about her demise.
This one tells the story of when she was told
She wasn’t welcome and to live in the cold
Another stain, another pain, her heart cries
She’s fallen so many times yet still she tried
The tool that has owned her for so long
Her only comfort when all was wrong
Is poised in position she’s ready to die
She wipes away her tears, her final cry
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The tool that has owned her for so long
Her only comfort when all was wrong
Is poised in position she’s ready to die
She wipes away her tears, her final cry
this stanza was a very sad ending to a well written poem. the rhyming was done very well. i like this a lot. nice emotion
Laura. -
amazing
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thats really fucking good
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aww, so emotional, so sad and depressing...i love this poem, its really great, amazing poem
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you
are
AMAZING
=)
2 brilliant poems in the same week
sacre bleu
love you
SeeJ
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very sad write filled with descriptive images. The write had a good flow to it and set to a good rhyme scheme. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
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You express alot of deep pain, pain that many are able to relate to. This flows beautifully and the rhyme is very well done. Just one tiny grammarical error, see's in the third line does not require the apostrophe. You end this very dramatically which hits the reader strongly. Great work.
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yayyy
it's so good to see you've got a new poem!
it feels like its been ages since i've read one of yours
it's awesome and dark and beautifully written,
tehy ryhming is perfection and .l.o.v.e. it
love ya beckness
<3 tigger
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hmmm..
I don't really know what to say,
Words beautiful and awesome come to mind,
but I want to say something detailed and smart.
I can relate to it, not the her part though, in some ways maybe, but no i'm not a girl, otherwise i'd be your daughter not son.
Well the I'll stick to my first thoughts.
This is awesome and beautiful just like you
Bravo bravo and kudos to you.
The brotherhood of the travelling sisters salutes you.
Your son
Sean
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