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With Closed Eyes

with my eyes closed tightly
So I don't have to see this
The pain is felt through the eyes
Can't the pain stop with the closed eyes
The eyes, green and full of pain close
They close so as not to be seen
For when seen, they are felt
No one should see this pain
So with my eyes closed
I hide in the shadows
So no one sees my pain
I view the world through closed eyes
And live my days with closed eyes

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  • Forlorn Dreams
    September 21, 2007

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    GREAT concept, but its wordy. Never read anything quite like this, its unique. Wonderful way to describe pain and your emotions on how its dealt with. Bravo!

    Kelcey


  • Celticjedi
    September 15, 2007

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    I like the concept of closing your eyes (which are full of pain) so as not to see the pain. Does that make sense? Oh well lol! Great entry dear, keep up the great work and thanks!
    Luvs,
    Cj


  • Megan Awesome
    September 12, 2007

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    This is so sad! Dark and depressing, but a very very good ... no wait ... GREAT poem! I love it. I can't really choose a favorite though. Though the last four lines were very powerful. This was a wonderful poem.
    Megan