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At The Edge ....Just Fall

Standing at the edge of my future

Rubble debirs all around my past

hidden jewels umoung the rocks

that i cant deny.

If i look back my feet hold me

I see the peaceful light before me

love full of promise

calling my name softly

should i decide to jump out of this trama

Could i be sure someone would catch me?

Love would drift me down tenderly

I could not look ever look back

My jewels would they be safe?

Takes great bravey and faith of my heart 

Should I leap away from this wreckage?

I want to fly free

but my wings have been broken many times

I am afraid to use them

waiting on my breakthough

Love awaits me patiently

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  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    Beautiful Melancholy...

    Awesome write, good question posed on the brink of newfound happiness... Reminds me of the old saying, it goes something like: "jump, and a net will catch your fall" ... Yes, go for it, girrrrl!! Congrats on the Emerald Cup!! This is a wonderful masterpiece, and I really love the haunting imagery, as well. Thank you for sharing your heart with us, and keep on keeping on!! Peace, love and hugs, xx Cyn xx


  • melphleg gold member
    January 15, 2008

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    imagery

    Now, this piece has imagery. It has wonderful metaphors. It speaks to me personally too. I know what is like to have rubble lying around me and wondering if I can trust again to jump into a new adventure and to risk love. This piece is very good. It's enjoyable to read and has a good message. This is the kind of poetry I can come back to and enjoy reading again.


  • BonaFidePoet
    December 3, 2007

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    Thsi is truly interesting. The picture adds to the thought, and I love how you used a cave/mine/tunnel idea to express this thought. Great job.


  • Naridill
    September 25, 2007

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    Beautifully said. The imagery holds a nice concept and forms nicely around the meaning, very intriguing piece.

    Much luck


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    September 20, 2007

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    "My jewels would they be safe?" It is natural to worry about those..
    Nice write.
    Thank you for entering.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    September 11, 2007

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    So sad

    To those who have been broken listen to your heart not your mind for as we know our minds arent always right but our hearts speak true


  • PerfectImperfection
    September 11, 2007

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    A very deep and intriguing take on the prompt chosen. Nicely penned! Thank you for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!

  • Bob Fox
    September 11, 2007
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    To find love

    Chances may have to be taken. the jump might just be worth it even without the jewels


  • Spiritual Poet gold member
    September 11, 2007

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    what a tough spot to be in

    I guess I can only say this.... if you are on the edhe of a chasm and it isnt what God wants then you are taking a huge risk. If you jump and it is what God wants there is no risk at all even if it looks to be risky. This is well written and touching. God bless you, Mark

  • Liquid memories
    September 11, 2007

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    life is full of risks

    at times we do not know which path or way to go, road too far, cnnot see the end, or if right choice was made. Chances are what we take, amybe, perhaps then work to make it right.
    Ok, I will catch you sis, so jump.
    this was a terrific write, honest, down to earth, realistic.


  • Griswold silver member
    September 11, 2007

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    Beautifully written and full of trepidation for the future, but as they say, you cant win if you dont play...Best of luck...Scott

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