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[ Let me be, let me go, ]

Let me be, let me go,
Let me free, just do not let me down

Seeping in
Blackening
Going farther
Fallling back
Slipping grasps
Attempting fate
Losing greatly
Testing luck

Let me show who I am,
Just do not let me down.

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  • aeolia
    November 3, 2007

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    It's okay, nothing more. I really don't find any deep meaning or substance to it, and while you attempted to use powerful words & phrases in the middle stanza, it backfired with the repetition.

    Sorry, it's just mediocre.
    --Cristina


  • nichtmich silver member
    September 11, 2007

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    Really interesting poem about an adventurous person. Life, whether things are good or bad are not for the faint of heart and we all need a bit of help sometimes. The last two lines are the BEST!!! IMO

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    September 10, 2007

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    This is really good
    Let me be, let me go,
    Let me free, just do not let me down
    Thank you for sharing this piece.
    Keep writing.