I've dreamt of you
seen your smile
felt your embrace
as you hold me
for the first time
I've wished upon
every star that twinkles
as the years
pass by slowly
I've wasted time
with little hope
even though
I knew all along
you never wanted me
you walked away
with no regrets
So here I stand
without you
with little hope
of ever knowing
the person
who holds my heart
Author notes
well this is me missing the person who is suppose to be my dad. The background is by Freed by Mercy. Thank you for the use of it!
My name is Cayla T
A contest entry
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I'm sorry... you can wish for someone so much, but you can't always make them arrive, no matter how hard you may try.
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This is so sad... what a powerful and beautiful poem; I'm very impressed. WELL DONE and thankyou for entering.
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Awwww...
This is so sad
It really touched my heart. Your emotion has come across so very clearly in this one and I wish you all the best 
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That is beautiful, honey. I love it and feel every word....you KNOW I do.....LOL
Great write.....can't wait to see more!
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Very good, I love the way it is written. My favorite lines would have to be
So here I stand
without you
with little hope
of ever knowing
the person
who holds my heart
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Though the font is hard to read. -
They say you can't miss what you've never had or known, but that couldn't be further from the truth.
Just a little error, in the line, "past by slowly", the word should be "passed".
Great write and thanks for entering!
~Memoirs
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Thank you and I did fix that.
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Sad
Very sorry about your Dad. -
A poignant poem. The background does fit well. You can custom size this. In the small box underneath the background when you first lad it is a number. Set that number at 225 for this poem, so the type doesn't overlap the picture or the tears. I would suggest choosing bold for the font, and choosing colors in the very light range (Perhaps a very light gray, almost white) as I did, especially for the poem.
I noticed one error: "of ever know" should be "of ever knowing"
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Thank you, I fixed it all (even the missing "ing" in knowing)LOL and I also credited you in my notes for the background.
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-Tears-
Oh my dear sweet soul, I so wish I could fill every void in your precious heart. While reading this I could feel such emptiness. I don't know what it's like to be without a father, and I sure wish I could do more to help you. He is missing out of one of thee most beautiful angels on the face of this earth. I love you my AP daughter dear, and hurt when you do. Know I'm here if you ever need me. Peace sweetie, your AP Dad, Timothy, aka poeticweaver~
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This is a very nice piece full of emotion.
I've wished upon
every star that twinkles
as the years
past by slowly
I've wasted time
with little hope
even though
I knew all along
you never wanted me
you walked away
I can relate to this.
Thank you for sharing and goodluck to you in the contest.Best Wishes
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such emotions of real life pulls me in and tugs at my heart please note it is all his lost not none of yours...
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