If I could be the arms
that hold you in the night
Underneath a sky
caressed in full moon light
If I could be the lips
your kisses rain upon
Ever to be missed
never to be gone
If I could be on breath of air
that carries you to me
Whispered words not to share
with anyone but thee
If I could be the chosen one
your heart's entrusted to
The stars the moon the rising sun
i will give to you
A contest entry
- Simply The Best.... by FlipperSwitch.
600 points, ended September 24, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~~~* Emotion*~~~ by Maybe Anastasia.
300 points, ended October 10, 2007, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Look Into My Heart...Make me feel good about myself. by Beautiful-N-Broken.
325 points, ended November 18, 2007, 2 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pick your favorite prewrite by Loveandblessings2u.
600 points, ended December 10, 2007, 31 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me smile, rock my world, make me love you baby by Stardust100.
550 points, ended December 10, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - TEN THOUSAND POINTS OF RHYME! (now 15,000) - Part 4 Love by cricketjeff.
1250 points, ended December 27, 2007, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter Your Best PW! by O.o.
700 points, ended December 25, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Romance by Frodofan.
600 points, ended February 9, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Love Poetry Ever Written!!!! Give Me All of Your Passion!!! by Black Swan Rose.
350 points, ended March 28, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Expressing Your Poetic Feelings by D Saul So Sexy.
550 points, ended March 31, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Romance.. (guys only) by Angelflower.
1340 points, ended May 27, 2008, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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it's been a while since i've been on here. internet got shut off
i knew if i stopped by your page, i would leave smiling. you have such a beautiful way with words. a little surprised not to see anything new.
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This was really beautiful.. and the imagery was really vivid and created a lovely picture in the minds eye.. Well done!! I really loved this..
Best of luck..
Angel
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a kiss a wish. a wonderful gift of ur love places into my
posesion and mine into urs. my heart will beat as urs. as if it were one a tender kiss i knew this was just one long wonderful dream not yet seen to this reality. my love my angel of love. just one dream. just one wish just one for me to love. -
this is such a smooth flowing imagery filled love poem!! I just loved it! What a great tribute to someone special.
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wow this was a really great poem
i loved it
when i was reading it i felt the love from
this poem and the emotion it was crazy but
i loved it i really reading your poems
they are really great keep up the great work
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very nice piece you did here best wishes with this in the contest
ya boi D -
This is such a beautiful writing - I could read things like this here a little more often and perfectly content. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet and ever ready for use. Thoughts like this should be shared more often.
♥ Touchof1der -
"If I could be on breath of air"
^This line bothered me for the lack of "the" before "breath." I realize its omission aids the flow, but that just shows that is somewhat contrived and unnatural. I wish there was someway you could rework that line so that it wouldn't be so.
Also, there's a rule against the word "I" not being capitalized, so please change that one in the last line if you want to be eligible for a trophy and you do stand a pretty good chance. -
Made me sigh...
this is one of those poems every girl wishes was written for her. beautiful.
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wow...defintely deserving of all the trophies!!
You are one talented writer!!
I totally enjoyed this peice..i think mostly becuase i can relate to it and cuz it seems like something i would write.
Awesome job!
L-R-P
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Thank you so much for your entry in our contest 'Love' to look for the best 'rhymer' on Allpoetry, in our opinion.
As we have had nearly 100 entries this has been a difficult contest to judge and although not a winner, we thoroughly enjoyed reading your entry.
We hope that you will enter the rest of the rounds in our Rhyming Extravaganza.
All the best Sue and Jeff.
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What I meant by grammar id that you have no commas or full stops in your work, and you're using capital letters without using full stops.
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Lovely poem. You need to fix up your grammar and spelling. But overall, Lovely. I'm happy to make space for it in the final lot. (I'm going through and deleting the ones I don't like)
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Merry Christmas.
Thanks for the HM.I don't see any misspellings.I'm not sure what the grammar part is.Not politically correct but maybe poeticly.Anyway I thank you for your input and the award.
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This is so beautiful a lovely write indeed.
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First I want to ask you to please not 5 star my comment or comment me back in anyway.
I am trying hard not to find out who anyone is at this time.
Your poem is truly very lovely. I wrote one once called "If I could" however mine did not turn out half as good as yours.
This is a very loving and sweet piece, that I enjoyed a lot.
Thanks for entering my contest and I wish you tons of luck.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Wow...that is very tender and promising!!! Lovely poem!
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Outstanding!
One of those writes you read and say damn wished I'd thought of that!
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Thanks Quill
I know what you mean and this is why I will read more of your work.
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I can relate to this seeing I broke up with my fiance b.c I felt like this about someone else... As Always great write... Koodles
Blessed be
Mystic
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This is very very good. Thank you so much for entering my contest. Good luck!!
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It's nice to see a poet who can put words together, make sense, and relate to their readers.
I too am a poet and have a passion for writing and am an incurable romantic
But it is wonderful to know a men could express their passion so beautifully. You are the man! I could imagine myself right there and the still of the evening without sunlight to intrude. I see the twilight's in your eyes as the moon sets up the mood.I want to get lost in your eyes and consumed by your kiss...
I really think it hits home with all romantics.!!!
Congratulations!
~~GRACE~~
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This is lovely!
I love the rhyme and I love the romance! Beautifully written. Welcome to Wise Poet's...I somehow missed when you joined the group!
Carolyn
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Hi
Havn't been on line much.TY for your comments
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GOOD LUCK!
that was bloody brilliant!!!!!!!!!, Honestly mate! that was exceptional!!, good luck in the contest! -
hmm.. wow.. I like this.. It has an air of.... old english almost. but its still easy to relate to. Very nice! Thanks for entering.
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Very sweet and the rhyme was very nicely done; a very nice feeling
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How lovely and sweet! Best of luck to you!
Love~
Az
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This had me dreaming and hoping....well done, good luck!
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Awww,this is lovely.So sweet and romantic.She would be a very lucky lady...Always enjoy your writes.
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Ah, a beautiful, truly lovely love poem!
I am delighted to receive the link to this poem and trust you will send me many more invitations to read your splendid verses. 
Sweet and filled with the most loving images! May I please post this on Poetry Planet?
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