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Reflected in Black and White

When the moon rises above
and the shadows whisper into the light,
when the dawn's embrace comes to grace the night,
that's when my heart'll finally reach it's melting point.

There's nothing one can do to salvage
anyone's heart, to save it; to brave it out is enough.
Its hard to belive, it's hard to breath
and then you slowly begin to relize that nothing's
relected in black and white alone.

Slippery, silent fucking, itch,
there's nothing to keep you happy,
and I havent had enough of it yet.

You rave and rant and cry and feel sorry for youself.
But on those days and nights when
your words and ways of acting, cut into someone else,
you raise a blind eye to it, and assume that its alright.

Your eyes shimmer upon the path laid in front you,
but you refuse to look up until it bites you in the nose.
The last time the day fucked with night....
was when the last volcanic erruption exploded.

To keep yourself down, to keep yourself in
a state of isolated pain, you force incidents to happen.
All the things you think you do that don't matter and in the end,
you find yourself suffering.

Well how the in the name of bloody fucking hell,
do you explain the misery inflicted upon others.
Its ristricting and binding and in the light of things,
no one can exist but you.

In a world that's hidden inside,
you remain hidden to what's happening on the outside.
A raging inferno trapped in a bottle, willing myself not to speak
to avoid becoming a ranting, raving bitch.

You darken your eyes to the world around you,
and act like you have no clue,
when it all caves in on top.
Seeking blame and solice in another,
you search for sympathy and expect everything to
fall in for you.

As I fight with myself to keep sane,
i strive to keep another the same.
Slipping sliding, breathing of noxious air,
I can feel these fucking horrors rip me from the inside out.

You seek to destroy the bindings that hold
your support systems together
and take them for granted when they're there.
But when they're not then it's time for you
to fall on your knees and wallow in your sorrow.

A broken butterfly falls apart infront of you,
but attempts to salavge itself for you.
You fuck with it's heart and eat its sorrow
when you know that its doing its best to save you.

But should that butterful waver in its undying loyalty to you,
you crumble and fall, despite the overwhelming evidence
of your neglect, disregard and integrity of the butterfly.

Your eyes shimmer upon the path laid in front you,
but you refuse to look up until it bites you in the nose.
The last time the day fucked with night....
was when the last volcanic erruption exploded.

You rave and rant and cry and feel sorry for youself.
But on those days and nights when
your words and ways of acting cut into someone else,
you raise a blind eye to it, and assume that its alright.


Author notes

I belive that this is free form. I really don't like to convey the message for the reader, I like one to be able to relate to it on their own. But for the record I'll say that it's about a selfless, respective, caring friend, and their inner feelings upon those they give pieces of theirself up for. Its about how certain primary people (parents, greedy/self absorbed friends) don't see how they're affecting their support systms....this is a very personal poem, so I'm really very uncomfortable saying this.

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  • written-in-ink
    September 11, 2008

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    To keep yourself down, to keep yourself in
    a state of isolated pain, you force incidents to happen.
    All the things you think you do that don't matter and in the end,
    you find yourself suffering.




    grrr

    i do that but that was my favorite part

    love this lots

    good job


    • Coco Mara
      September 11, 2008
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      haha,
      yeah but that's the joy of writing
      you like what you like.


  • Chelsea Void
    September 17, 2007

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    I don't mind swearing in the least, but I think in some areas you over-used it in places you didn't have to. there's a few spelling errors dotted throughout the piece, but that's okay. they're common ones, I suppose.
    I feel the power and sentimentality/personal relation in this very strongly and I think it's very courageous to put it out there.
    It feels more like venting in stanzas than poetry to me, and believe me, there is a difference. That does not mean I value the passion any less in this piece, it just doesn't fall under a poetic nature, even though it is free form.
    I think that all the thoughts you have here in this piece can be used to create a structured (but still can be free verse) poem with a concrete theme throughout. This gives the ramblings of thoughts, which is in no way meant to be condescending. Everyone should write this at some point. It's a good form of release and I appreciate you showing it to the community. I know how it feels to be used and to feel like the 'whipping boy' so to speak. it's a horrible thing, but you show immense strength in putting yourself out there.