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Human Puppet

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I am your puppet
My infatuation with you has caused the proclivity
of  thinking you may want me,
not just own me

I remain restless with a constant implosion
of emotional self denial
 
Your decimation of my character has sought
me to seek respite,
to perform in shadows
 
My silhouette dancing upon walls
of mercantile stages
Hoping to find an owner who
will be my savior

Author notes

For group contest: Word bank
Restless
Infatuation
Proclivity
Silhouette
Mercantile
Respite
Implosion
Decimation
Savior
Puppet

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  • Mykeee silver member
    January 22
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    This was great the way you used the word bank and so poetically well. This was creative.

  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    January 21

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    Excellent job.
    You pulled this off, so perfectly.
    Remarkable writing.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce

  • Ephiphany gold member
    January 21

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    Don't know how I missed this one,

    but sure am glad I saw it now. loved the imagery here. Great job and thanks for sharing.

    ephiphany♥


  • Birgitte silver member
    January 21

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    I really like the idea of describing the relationship as a puppet being controlled by the other. The drawing is really beautiful. Did you make that?

  • natchstucco
    January 20

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    Well done with the words given. I admit that some of these words were a challenge to me to know so I did look them up and you have done a marvelous job of impementing them in the script.

  • DestinyFate
    October 12, 2007
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    OMG!!I can relate with thin in two different ways. Your good at writing.
    Tonya


  • Cerulean gold member
    September 16, 2007
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    I love what you did with these words.


  • Riftkin gold member
    September 14, 2007
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    this was awesome and I love how you added the words into the poem.

    Riftkin

  • Darkened Seraph
    September 14, 2007

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    This is stunning, i loved reading this, for the word bank being such a arse you made it look like a little walk in the park its soo damn good, and vote wise your doing excellent which shows i'm not the only one who thinks this lol. congrats on a fantastic write and good luck


  • Laura
    September 13, 2007

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    omg i just love that picture and yes i may very well steal it hehehehe this is a bloody brilliant poem love xxx


  • Naridill gold member
    September 13, 2007

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    Beautifully sad & emotionally gripping!


  • Blankscreen2222 gold member
    September 12, 2007
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    This is sad.
    wow, what a brill piece.
    Very Good!


  • fennywest
    September 12, 2007
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    Thank you very much for the encouragement.

    Fenny

  • Swangrnv
    September 12, 2007
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    very interesting

    this write is dark in content, but it shines in composition I like it alot!


  • Mykeee silver member
    September 10, 2007

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    oooooo - this was deep. Great way to use the words but making it work is just a sheer talent. Great picture to go with the piece. Good Luck. ~ Mikeeeeee


  • Griswold
    September 10, 2007

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    Beautifully written with the bank words and very few others, a sad , depressing write indeed. Best of luck in our contest...Scott


  • Bedroom Eyes
    September 10, 2007

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    Sort of a depressing piece, but wow is the imagery good. You've done wonders with the word bank, and the graphic is STELLAR with this poem.

    Outstanding work my friend

  • Puppydog gold member
    September 10, 2007

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    WONDERFUL!!!

    Your message here is just how I feel right now, a puppet dangling on someone elses strings. Wonderful write!


  • ModernXTimes silver member
    September 10, 2007

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    What a depressing poem. It's a very good poem (no, it's a great poem), but it's very sad:

    "My silhouette dancing upon walls
    of mercantile stages
    Hoping to find an owner who
    will be my savior"

    I got this image in my head reading it. A girl on loose puppet strings dancing on a dimly litted stage dancing for nobody. I think that any girl could relate to the wonderful words you have written here. BRAVO
  • x-Black-Butterfly-x silver member
    September 10, 2007

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    this was a dark write but down beautifully using the word bank
    makes my one look lame he he
    an awsome write if you dont win...ill...make them all revote he he

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