Porcelain heartbeat
emotionless little doll
with abnormal feet
A contest entry
- The Far-Eastern Theme Haiku Contest by NoWayJo.
600 points, ended October 10, 2007, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Haikus! by Dlvvanzor.
300 points, ended October 15, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dust Off Those Old Haiku (Traditional 5-7-5) by Pollycheck.
425 points, ended December 15, 2007, 57 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Porcelain heartbeat
emotionless little doll
with abnormal feet
Thank you for entering my ku contest. I really like this write. You have described a very vivid picture of a doll, or is it a real geisha? -
Thanks for entering!
I wish you the best of luck.
I hope you had fun.
-Dlvvanzor (Like my haiku comment for the haiku contest? lol)
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very well said
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thank you!
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The first two lines made me sad, but the last one was really funny and I had to keep from laughing. Nice written, good luck in the contest!
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This haiku feels as though a painting of a geisha image itself. A delicate yet powerful image, Inkstar, and thank you so much for this entry to the contest!
Jo
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OOooooooo. That's awesome. The form is perfect for the subject. I like the way "porcelain" indicates smooth and flawless as well as fragile and breakable. Geisha are supposed to be all of those. And the abnormal feet commentary lets me know how much you disapprove of the "beauty is pain" philosophy.
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I liked this one; abnormal is one word for it, uugly is another, when it comes to feet that were bound, blech!
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