Hooks suffice
among yellow fingernails
and rotten teeth
in a contraption of metal
devices, one wishes
never to know.
Tick
Tick
Tick
The buttons are pressed
in numerical order
to release this elemental disease,
ripping out decayed enamel.
Bloodshed is imminent,
the claw of justice
clamps to broken necks,
twisting backwards,
seeing a new light.
With eyes blinded
staring upwards at
deadly films anon,
playback twitches again and again,
swallowing vital clotting.
Sewing machines
stitch the names of guilt
on open bones of white,
while inches of skin
stretch farther apart from needles
tearing coral flesh
into a puzzle of
scattered membrane.
Scissors snip and
rearrange your body,
a modification so beautiful,
my mannequin of perfection.
Deceit bleeds more
than any other kind,
and the intestines of
the weak unravel from
this crank of destruction,
tying knots with black venter
around your neck.
Choking in asphyxiating laughter,
tonsils swell and contain
the poison in your lungs,
the acid in your heart,
the venom in your veins.
One more cancer strikes
as you scream in
merciful undertones,
and I leave you hollow in your memory
by cutting out your tongue.
A tattoo of permanent scars
flood your brain as it falls
onto the floor of white tile,
and you remember
never to lie to me
again.
Author notes
This is sort of a kind of torture trap I would like to see in the SAW series. Where you have hooks in your fingernails and teeth, and with one click they're all ripped out... and someone takes scissors and cuts your skin open, engraving your lies onto your own bones.
Liars will get no where with life. You will only get severely scarred.
A contest entry
- Sick and Twisted 7 by Acidanthra.
700 points, ended September 12, 2007, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Good god Kerri, this is fucking intense and amazing. Forget about this being in saw, I want this to be in a horror movie of it's own. I have no idea how many times I have wanted to do soemthing very similar to someone for their deceit..... but this.... this hits the nail on the head. There is a reason you won gold in that contest, and that is because this poem is perfect. If you ever get the incling to actually do this, let me know and I will be your partner in crime! Bloody orgy anyone? Lmao.... fucking fantastic!
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Wow as usual
As you've told us, as you've shown us the well of your pain. As you try to live with this loss that leaves you bone-white in a desert that no one ever wants to see. In this nightmare of sand a thousand miles from water a flower somehow has bloomed. A child's smile will never wither. A child's love is forever with us. I have one poem that I hope helps you understand what can't be understood, it's called " Wild forever". c
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Wow. This is vivid, excellent. I could feel the hatred just pouring from it, the anger towards a liar pent up and seeming to be relased in this write. EXCELLENT job. I LOVED it.
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Very vivid and pained, full of profoundly deep, macabre images. This is beautiful beyond words.
One more cancer strikes
as you scream in
merciful undertones,
and I leave you hollow in your memory
by cutting out your tongue.
Incredibly powerful lines are written there.
This is a fabulous poem.
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DAMN, THIS IS GOOD!! This poem made me feel so good after I finished it, wow, you are damned good!! It ended with a smash ( all puns intended ) LOL! I absolutely loved the gory detail you worked into this write, of course, with the brain falling onto the floor, telling "whoever" remember never to lie to me again. That was just absolutely amazingly creative and genius!!!
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HOLY FUCK
THIS IS AMAZING!!!! ABSOLUTELY JUST.....WOW, wanna know what i really really love about yours???? It is full of gore but artfully described. This is EXTREMELY INTELLIGENTLY WRITTEN.....using anatomical words to describe the inside of parts of the body. I absolutely adore this, i think you have A LOT OF TALENT AND SHOULD CONTINUE TO WRITE LIKE THIS!
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Damn!
Thank yewwwwwwwwwwww
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W00T
GO YOU! You made it in the finalist......told ya it was good.
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As have you! Yay we're awesome
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your welcome!!!!!!!!
You know, one thing you did that i really found interesting was the way you described time (tick, tick, tick.....) that helped to build the suspence -
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I totally agree with you about the building of suspense. I felt it...
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