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Devil's Playground

 

My old playground is empty now
And all of the children are grown
I’m ill at ease with memories
That may not even be my own

I don’t remember if I played
The games that little Janie did
Her ready laugh and pretty smile
Kept painful secrets safely hid

They say Janie was a cherub

Before it happened - full of love
Afterwards – even angels wept
At what man is capable of

We didn’t understand the world
That little girl had once lived in
We didn’t know her very well
Or the sad places she had been

Often there was hunger and dirt
People were seldom even kind
By nine years old she lived a life
Fabricated in her own mind

Walked on her own feathery clouds
And breathed her own sweet fragrant air
She lived just far enough away
That nothing bad could reach her there

Walt Disney could do no better
There was a magic you could feel
Just knowing Janie any time
Left us no doubt it all was real

She never had to even try
To be the spirit that she was
God in His grace approved her game
And it existed just because

He blesses just a certain few
With a life so removed from care
Still there were those who disapproved
Of little Janie living there

They were the ones who hated her
Because she had her pretty game
They were the ones who felt cold rage
At the mention of Janie’s name

They said, “You are not welcome here
You’re ugly - just go away - hide”
And so they bit - and chopped - and tore
Until something inside her died

It was a gray November day
When we heard Janie lost her mind
We ran away, afraid to see
We all pretended to be blind

There was no laughing or crying
Inside the place where Janie hid
She never came back out to play
With any of the other kids

Years have passed since those childhood days
I can still see her in my mind
Sad that no one cared to save her
It’s too bad no one took the time

There is no way to find her now
Of course, who would even want to
I bet it’s cold and dark in there
Without any light to shine through

And there must be terrible things
Like dreadful spiders that can stalk
I want to ask her what it’s like
...But little Janie cannot talk

She was robbed of so many things
Of her voice, and who knows what more
She is the only one who graspes

The unspeakable wounds she bore

When they told us that she was gone
I think we all flushed hot with shame
And the weight of that childhood guilt
Left each of us profoundly changed

Because everyone heard her call
Begging for help that awful night
We heard her crying pitifully 
Put the blame on neighborhood blight

Janie saw her future clearly
In her last few lucid minutes
She just couldn't live in our world
With such callous people in it

They ignore terrified children

Who just need a safe place to be
That was when Janie went away
And that's when Janie became me

 

 

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Purple Pen wrote this for the contest "Pen Me A Tragedy", but it closed as I was entering. I hope you like it.

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  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    October 1, 2007
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    STUNNING WORK

    STUNNING WRITING. SO VERY VERY SAD TOO. YOUR IMAGERY IN THIS IS OUTSTANDING. IT IS SO TRUE THAT WHAT WE DO TO OTHERS WHEN YOUNG, LAST A LIFETIME. INDEED THEY HAVE A LIFETIME OF HURT AND OF HATING THEMSELVES BECAUSE OF OTHERS. LET THIS PIECE BE A WARNING TO WHAT COULD HAPPEN. WONDERFUL WORRK.

    ALL THE BEST
    WAYNE


  • aboomer silver member
    September 15, 2007

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    Love this! Great wording, images, and emotion. Held the interest for the whole read.
    It's sad, but so true, that the young don't realize how their words and actions can affect another - for a lifetime. Kids can be so cruel without even realizing it.
    And so many kids, too many kids, have to have that 'safe place' inside to live their lives, to escape from the trauma's, to escape from the harsh realities of life.
    And I really like your ending.
    This is a really good write!


  • Flying Eagle
    September 11, 2007

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    fantastic idea, showing the brain at work

    This poem must have a special meaning to you, and so beautifully written. I am sure this poem would have won. If only it was given the chance to enter the "Pen Me A Tragedy" contest.

    LH


    • Purple Pen
      September 11, 2007
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      Thank you for the nice review. I appreciate your comment. Always good to hear from you!

  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    September 11, 2007

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    A deeply-emotional piece

    This is a very sad piece of writing indeed. Such imagery too. Children's minds are so supple and at the same time fragile, that they can absorb anything and remember everything. Remembering the time when the other kids pushed her away, not wanting to play with her. Calling her ugly and other horrible names.

    Say something often enough to somebody [ let alone a child ] and they start to believe it themselves. Wonderful deep piece of writing here. Well done for this.

    All the best
    Wayne
    x


    • Purple Pen
      September 11, 2007
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      Thank you so much for reading and commenting on this one.


  • Poet Brokenheart
    September 10, 2007

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    Wow, very nicely written, and such a tragic tale. I was pulled in and completely swallowed up by this piece. it struck me mesmerized. Very descriptive, and great use of imagery. I can almost see Janie in my head. I love how you portray her throughout the poem. I Love the last stanza, especially the last 2 lines -

    "That was when Janie went away
    And that's when Janie became me"

    For me, the rest of the poem just lured me into a trance, and then that last line was like a snap of finger waking me up back into reality. Great write. and very good story.

    • Purple Pen
      September 10, 2007
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      Thanks You

      It's so interesting that you said that, because I wrote this as if in a trance. No one could have been more surpised at the ending than I.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    September 10, 2007

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    This had a powerrful punch to it. This hit the pit of my stomach. A sad piece with such emotion. made mew too with the rest of them reach out to embrace this child.. i am speechless with this piece.
    Tory
    You did a wonderful job on such a difficult topic.


    • Purple Pen
      September 10, 2007
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      Thanks, Tory. I described my coping mechanism as a child. I cannot put things graphically in words - yet.

  • Nanax7
    September 10, 2007

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    What a touching poem. Very full of intense feelings. Brought about a lot of emotions from memories of me. Thank you for posting


  • Know1
    September 10, 2007

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    It's always a shame when innoceence is not nurtured. There is such a dark undertone to this piece. We tend to underestimate the impact we can have on another persons life because we are so caught up in our own. Often all it takes are a few kind words and letting them know they are not alone. Well written and thanks for sharing. (Sorry, it's not a very critical review but nothing jumped out at me to be changed)
    Ben


    • Purple Pen
      September 10, 2007
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      I asked for critical review but I'm happy to know it stirred feeling in you. Thanks!


  • Devils Reject
    September 10, 2007

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    this is such a sad tale. makes me want to hug the poor child. excellent description and great write!

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