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e-tech metaphors

 

 

Cocooned in a room
HGTV chrysalis

A womb we spin
to secure us

deeply imbedded
in calloused
gray matter

The system restore
function nestled
among

intricate, deliberate, malicious

virus
splatter pattern
wall overlays

illustration page
displayed by paint
sprayed on block walls
where
no one's heard the
phrase

"Location. Location. Location."

human condition
viewed through grimy
bus windows

programming
leads it

to be

percieved
as highly
detailed
3D

animation.

reality inspired
high-tech
escapism things

freeze dryed
packaged life

dig that catchy name

reality TV

just add water

instant angst

drama from concentrate

where cardboard cut outs

play

for forty days and forty nights
in a contrived wilderness

studiously ignoring
internal combustion

painstakingly played
on the hind legs

of the Jiminy Cricket
face
(one of the three of Eve's)

answers
recieved

when they spout the
PC phrase...
"What would Jesus do?"

a question which begs
a qualifier...

When?
Now?
Or back then?

Do you think he'd
go for the save...

If he had it
to do over again?

or just wait
for four horsemen
to wipe
the hard drive

and OOPS!

forget to back up
the system...

make a check mark
on a page
that only makes sense
in context

when one notes
whats already been
checked...

-Dinosaurs √
-Neanderthals √
-Homosapiens ...

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  • soulfultia gold member
    April 8

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    This was an intricately woven piece, intense in places and messages carefully placed throughout.  Creatively penned and excellent brain candy my friend I love it ~Tia


  • MuddyKing silver member
    September 22, 2007

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    Not sure if all with understand the tech metaphors and deep instances of genius...biblical, human, acceptance, denial...you really want me to go on...if so let me read a dozen more times and find something new with each additional read...you always wrote in layers, and I believe you went over the heads of many in the circle...ya know?
    wisdom and wit becomes you girl
    love this

    contender

    peace and hugs
    Muddy


  • Catsparrow
    September 19, 2007

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    good

    I like your take on this technological age we live in.I like the way you structured the stanzas. Overall, pretty good.

  • tomisb
    September 11, 2007

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    Self interest is what you do with inventions. For most entertainment is another word for a policy of avoidence and you have taken me down the walk again to Tom Waits and "The large print giveth and the small print taketh away" Well down it was fun even if the message was as old as the hills that Moses walked out of
    Love, Tom B.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    September 10, 2007

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    Cinnamon,

    This makes me smile, just smile and I am in full agreement, full agreement.



    Len

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