Lying with my head at the foot
with my feet propped up
against the wall,
I stare at the ceiling of imaginary stars,
wishing on what isn’t there,
while the storm develops
outside the pane
of my room’s window
Listening to sounds of wind
through moving leaves,
like ocean waves
breaking on the shoreline
with hypnotic suggestions,
as closing eyes
enter another world,
and drifting sun joins in the slumber,
heating the way for dreams of tomorrow
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In the distance,
he approaches…
timidly, yet with determination.
His face with a strong
jaw line,
and piercing eyes
that make my heart flutter
as he smiles,
reflections of the summer sky
with a twinkle of stardust
Nearing
on the beach of reverie
under the sleeping sun,
I feel his breath
like ocean mist
on my face
his finger softly traces my lips,
a lingering of
salt water
His arms reach out to hold me,
while warming me with his kindness,
he tells me he is there
to protect me
from any emerging storm
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A rush of waves blur my vision,
as thunder stirs my images
from a world I never wished to leave…
I awaken,
realizing the ocean’s spray is
only the taste of my tears
streaming down an abandoned face,
And the bed’s comforter
is what surrounds me,
bringing no comfort
or warmth whatsoever.
I close my eyes,
begging them
to bring me back
to where he is
one more time
Author notes
freestyle seems to flow with how a dream is dreamt...
A contest entry
- "What You Love" by FallenAngel09.
300 points, ended October 4, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Imaginary stars... I used to have them. The glow in the dark ones?
This was great. The beginning capture me and then the whole sequence of this mystical dream... Wonderfully written.
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Thanks for entering my Valentine's Day contest, and good luck!
M a r l u x i a
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Thank you for your entry into my contest, your talent and hard work are very much appreciated. I loved this poem, it had that lazy summer romance with the twist of pain at the end that is so frequent of summer romances. I loved it and I am glad for your entry. Great job and good luck
Your Host,
Tiphanie
p.s sorry for not getting to you sooner, it has been hectic and all I have had time to do is study and go to class. Any way, hope you are well. -
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thank you for your comment and for the trophy.
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Excellent
Such a beautiful and well thought out poem. Best of luck in the contest
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Your words had me thinking longingly of my bed and sleep in the hopes of having such a dream. Very beautifully written. My best wishes to you in the contest.
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extraordinary/amazing/excellent
This was amazing!!! The whole dreaming thing was done so well...It was so awesome how you smoothly transitioned from and to each part of the dream...your metaphors where so good, my the middle of the poem it actually felt like I was dreaming as I read, because it just pulled me in so much...your and amazing writer!
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awesome comment... thanks! now.... WAKE UP! jk
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woooowwwwwwwwwwww... that is amazing. actually, i take it back, YOU are the amazing one. hehe =)
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thanks...
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oh man, i've had this dream before!! and you always want to go back to sleep instead of facing reality. definately a great poem. you wrote it well. i'm going to go read it again....
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haha... maybe i will,too! thanks!
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ya.. thats a good theory.. about free style...
i really like this one. its definately relatable... although i have never had a desire to dream about your boyfriends...
but! its no fun when you wake from a dream... oh well
some really great images here.. i like the scene after you wake... and the bits before that.. and the beginning .. and the end... yep.. that covers it.
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fyi... i don't have boyfriends!!!
and i guess if i did... i'm certainly glad YOU aren't dreaming about them.
and... there are times i am GLAD to wake up from a dream... for different reasons... but usually the ones that are good i never remember... unless i'm awakened in the middle of it by some fluke.. like thunder...
glad you liked each part of it... and actually COMMENTED... not that i'm shocked or anything...
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