I love you so much
So how can I hate you so much
Driving through the dark
Music blaring so loud
I can’t even hear myself scream it
Start thinking of you
And how much I hate/miss you so much
Then before I can remember why you came to mind
Tears begin to fall from my eyes
My breaths grew quicker but deeper
My heart started racing
I began to hyperventilate so much
Head grew light
I became dizzy
Tears came thicker
My crying louder
So much louder I couldn’t hear the music anymore
My vision grew blurry
My eyes closed
Opened to a light in the far distance
Then solid black as they closed again
Opening once more to a bright light about half as far
Everything dimming and coming back
The light blinding me so much
A loud ringing in my ears
Time stops and I see you
I tell you
“I miss you so much. I’ll always miss you.
I’m sorry for what happened.
I wish we could fix this. I wish so much…”
Time unfreezes
My steering wheel hits my chest
My windshield smashing open my skull
A last breathe of hyperventilation
And everything is black again
In the far distance, as you grow closer
You hear sobs grow louder
You hear music grow louder
As you come up to it, you stop.
You step out of your car, bare footed
The mess blocks your way out
The cries fade away to music
The music fades away to so much silence
And so much blood stains the souls of your feet
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wow is all I can say. This was VERY heart felt and deep. So emotional and touching. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Wow that was very heartflet. Brought tears to my eyes. I am really at a lose for words on this piece. Thanks for entering into the contest and good luck.
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very good write sweet and sad good job and good luck
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thanks a lot
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This is such a sad piece but I understnad where you are getting at loving someone so much when they dont deserve it so you hate them.This write is full of mixed emotions.Thank you for sharing bestwishes
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woah. talk about intense. who are you speaking of, may i ask?
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pretty much Zack. him and corey went to the concert with me. and it was "corey and zack" doing stuff. i didn't wanna go alone... but i felt like i was alone. and i realized that zack prolly doesn't wanna spend as much time with me as i thought he did
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that really sucks. talk about depressing.
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basically.... so i'm just done.
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dear schweet jeebus....
*huggles*
oh, dear....
I wanna give you real huggles!!!>.<
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mehh
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great imagery. i could picture this happening as i read it. and it flows nicely. this is amazing sam...
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thanx
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omg....
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