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Mozzie

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Can you see me flying round?,

I know you hear my buzzing sound,

I see the annoyance on your face,

But you can't get me in my hiding place,

I'm very hungry, I need to feed,

You're looking tasty, yes indeed,

Just a snack to see me through,

I solemnly promise not to chew,

I'll wait until you're fast asleep,

Then into your bedroom I will creep,

If you hear me then I'll run,

Else I'll feast till I am done,

My evening feast is overdue,

The main course being a bite of you,

I'll gorge myself on your life blood,

I think I'm being understood,

Don't think you'll ever get away,

I tell you now I'm here to stay. 

 

 

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  • Thank you for the beautiful entry to my contest,
    I love this poem about a mosquito so simple yet so detailed
    I love the rhyme flow and the many things you say, I like how you say “I solemnly promise not to chew” that is my favorite line,
    as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy

  • nilav
    July 8
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    liked it, good flow ....the mosquito will come and give you a shake-hand too...hihihi

  • captain howdy
    September 10, 2007
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    Lovely, cute, flows well! I like this one so much! Best of luck in your contest!!


  • crimsondew silver member
    September 10, 2007
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    Alright...Way to go mosquito....
    Very well written...All the best!


  • PhantomsAngel87 Greeters member
    September 10, 2007

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    G'day frieslandreject

    What a cute, delightful write for a Mozzie
    Almost made me like them

    Great flow and wonderful rhyme
    Thank you very much for your entry
    Best of luck
    Stay safe
    ~Amanda

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