my peace of life is gone
no more can i hold it dear
it's been taken away
by the enemy of the soul
no use for the heart anymore
no use for the mind
my peace has been taken away
buried beyond my grasp
too far away to find it
Author notes
hope you like it =]
A contest entry
- Quickie, 30 minutes, 10 entries, 50 Words. Beat The Clock! by Cupcrazy.
450 points, ended September 9, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow. This is so sad! And I can't find my favorite part! I like it all! This is deffinately as wonderful and very sad poem. Great write!!!
Megan -
Very nice take on the prompt and full of emotion Hugs, Bunny
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This is very sad, and the repeating line is used with good emphasis. This poem is tantalizing because the reader is left to ponder who took your peace away. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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i feel so privileged. i just learned the other day what tantalizing means and how it came into the english language =] that makes me happy!
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sad.
the repetition you use serves to emphasize your desperate situation. the idea of having no use for heart and mind, is very troubling, kind of like the farthest you can go in despair.
Nice entry. good luck in the contest. -
this is good, lol hang on ..more to come..lol gl
MM
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I like it
but im not a judge lol.
Great job on the prompt.
best of luck to you.
Tory -
Your prompt! A snippet from one of my pieces that I rather like. Take it where you will
"inner peace invaded
with the fierceness
of Mongol tribes
burying feudal thoughts
beneath temples
of self-awareness;"
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