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Sea of Love



Cast your nets, drag them in, catch a dream, sink or swim
A feast for the Spirit - Warmth for your soul
Death on the rocks should you ride the shoals.....

Tonight again I'll cast my nets
into the moon's silvery sea
and hope to catch a dream or two
If there are any left for me
I fear each time I drag them in
Perhaps a rip or tear there'll be 
In nets so old and cobweb thin 
And all my dreams gone slippery
I hesitate tossing nets in
Suspicious of the things I see


I pace storm-worn decks nervously
I’m so afraid to lose again

Dreams sparkle still below the waves
As if to lure and bait me
Sparkle and shine deceives the eyes
Moonlight can hide treacherous claws
Of things hiding deep in the brine
Waiting to strike with gaping jaws
To swallow what magic is left
In a poor battered seaman’s heart
All we fishermen of this sea
Know well the risks when we embark

 

 

Author notes

"Water is the essense of life" was the prompt. What is life without dreams or love?

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    December 11, 2008

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    A delight to read with all your imagery....The sea being a creative bed of many images you cast as a net into the sea...A delight to read, over and over again...Bookmarked!

  • eternal-devotion
    September 10, 2007

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    This is excelent.

    My first impression is that this is avery good discription of a seamans life and goes well with the prompt. Emotionally I can sense a wind swept sea.(On the wind swept sea)is what I would have used as a last line after "Know well the risks when we embark." This is not hard to read and as such it is not awkward. My favorite part is the first four lines. The title is very good and the first line sets the tone very well. The last line works with this. I liked this.


    • Purple Pen
      September 10, 2007
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      Eternal Devotion, I can always count on you for a good review. Thanks so much for your comments. I did make some changes from the original you read.


  • aboomer silver member
    September 9, 2007

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    I like how you have taken your prompt (water..) and run with it in this poem. You've cast your nets into the water (sea) to catch your dreams. Very nice in the images and emotion. I like your wording. I like how you have also put in the risks involved in seeking your dreams..the hidden things with gaping jaws that swallow what magic is left.
    Very nice write.
    Good luck in your contest.


    • Purple Pen
      September 10, 2007
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      I've always been intrugued my the notion of the fisherking, too alive to die, yet too wounded to live. That put me in mind of fishing the cold dread dark of the Sea of Love. I've missed you, child! Both of us too busy these days, I suppose.

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