It Is Halloween Night Not A piece Of Candy in Sight.
Others Scouting For Candy While I'm stuck in my bedroom.
Then A Piece Of Candy Flies Through My Window, Right As my Father Opens my Door it flies and knocks him out, I get up And Walk About.
I look through my window then unexpectedly Duck Also Knocking my mom out, I begin To Scout.
This Window Is Dreadful Dirty And All.
But Through It Candy Will fall.
I will Call It The Window Of Doom Were Candy Will Fall Above All.
I keep looking through the window everytime I peek A little A piece of candy Fliesthrough knocking over Valuable Items.
Halloween Is now Finally Over After Being Stuck in My Room for An Hour or two.
I fall asleep, Waking Me Up A Piece of Candy, From Then On Every Halloween Night I must Cover up my window, or Candy Will Flood My Room, Isn't That A good Thing?
Author notes
Number 5C
A contest entry
- 15 and Under ONLY ~ Win A Gold Membership in our Halloween Contest! by Amunet Wolfbane.
6000 points, ended November 14, 2007, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell Me' Whatcha think! =)
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This is a rather intriguing piece you have penned. To have a window that has candy flying through it on Halloween
that would be very cool but I think too much for the teeth to handle
Thank you for entering the contest - and the best of luck!
Blessings
Bel
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Thnx For The Tips, Leander
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This is quite a funny and cute poem that you have entered into the contest
and I actually enjoyed reading it...
Some remarks I'd like to make though: English isn't my maternal language and in my opinion, this piece could use some more punctuation. Without punctuation it can be quite tough for me to 'see', or 'feel' the natural pauses inside the lines
Also the all caps bothered me a bit, but it's just a personal preference as to how you write things down huh thinking about poetic freedom right now
An oopsie:
Line 3 (and 9): 'Flys' should be flies (two times in 3 and once in 9)
Thank you very much for entering the contest - wishin you the best of luck
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LOL This is really very cute. I must say all that candy may not be a good thing But then again, it might
Great job on this
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This was a sweet treat. It would be a dentist's dream for his patients. lol I have a sweet tooth myself and now I have an urge to get some chocolate. Thank you for the halloween fun here and good luck in the contest. Keep on writing poet. Excellent work. seamaiden ♥
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lol thnx guys I'll need the luck
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lol, i love this just on time for holloween, a piece of candy knocks your father out, i was like wait a second, that keep me on reading, you did a really good job at this, good luck in the contest.
see,
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LOL quite humorous... that's a nice plan. I should try it someday
well this was a great poem. I really liked it, and I am sure you will do very well in the contest. I wonder what kind of candy flew through your window... jolly ranchers? lol..
~Pandy~
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