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Into My Eyes

Look into my eyes
What do you see
A lonely soul
Trying to get free

Look into my eyes
What do you see
Someone in desperate need
Wanting something more from life

Look into my eyes
What do you see
Someone tortured in agony
Trying to ease the pain

Look into my eyes
What do you see
A girl that got lost
Trying to find her way

Look into my eyes
What do you see
Someone not worth nothing
Just a girl that is a lonely soul

Look into my eyes
What do you see
Please tell me
So I can end all this confusion
(12-5-02)

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  • Nam
    September 9, 2007
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    "Someone not worth nothing" - I would suggest changing "nothing" to "anything".

    Also feel some (not for all, varied) question marks should be applied to some of the verses. Like, every other one. I think that would read better.

    A nice piece here.