pain of beauty
beauty of pain
flame burns brightly
hot to the touch
searing of flesh
burning the skin
sting of a blade
piercing my skin
hot breath and blood
burns deep within
release of pain
release of burden
bringing my pleasure
closer to you
pain of beauty
beauty of pain
agony of desire
desire of agony
A contest entry
- Write me the opposite!!!! by Ray Von.
550 points, ended September 12, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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The short lines, making you pause, made it longer and more powerful to read, very intense.
Thank you for entering,
Maria
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Interesting contest theme here - opposites. Liked the brevity of the lines, the flow and how you have explained the title in the poem.
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hmmm, great lil poem you have here really liked this, which suprissed me (; i like the flow of it and th emotion is expressed well repition works well too,
well done with this poet,
I wish you the best of luck in this contest
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Hm. Very interesting. I liked the reversing of the words, and the repetition of the words:
"pain in beauty/
beauty of pain"
Nice job keeping the lines nice and short, and breif. They seemed to flow very well.
Great job!
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fantastic.
the hypocrisy behind the whole idea of this poem was amazing. I loved every second of it, which is rare when I read. you did an azimg job, I really hope you win the contest!
<3.
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"Agony of desire;
Desire of agony"
Those last two lines really left you thinking. I really liked this. Good job.
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