Unwrapping wisps of plastic's brisk envy
still holding charmingly close to your core.
Pulsations of a comfortless kept mind
where undertones send tremors to the floor.
Hushed phantasms lurk in secrets, buried
deep in conciousness's integrity.
Creamy electricity surges through
veins, beaten up by chaos in your heart.
Meek ebony suspended by power,
in aspiring brilliance he screams.
A thin smoke melts into sunrise, drifting
silently, until oil wets him down.
Lucid radiation giggles from her
grave, raising hell. The world is in her eyes.
Grey shimmers tangle personality,
his ego heavy, but his face cloudless.
Glittering promises, made modestly,
send twilight a golden serenity.
Author notes
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light vs. dark
imacrazyface101
A contest entry
- Round 1: Hit me With your Best Pre-write. by edit my world..
425 points, ended October 20, 2007, 64 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This was really creative, and impressive. I enjoyed this piece very much, the cadence was even through out with inspiring images and excellent dichotomy between two seperate things. Best of luck in the contest
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your poetry flows a lot better now in my humble opinion for you are keeping to a beat, it helps poetry i think
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Ahh i asked for pre-writes.
I'll let this slide...just this once!
I love the imagery! Though i would like depth into what this is, it almost sounds like somepowerful -cough- lol
I really loved this
++finalist++
Thanks for entering Girly!
~TheSpork Princess~
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Wow Tiffany! This is the first poem I read from you that is so deep I don't completely undertand it. But I can sense the irony in the use of description you so choose. See, I can really sense the beautiful imagery you propose but it's hard to put the pieces together. (I can totally relate, ha ha! lol Overall I really do like this! I'm going to read it again and figure it out the best I can. Good job!
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