Few men can know the beauty of the sewers down below
Where the filth that people leave behind is left to ebb and flow
Stalactites of congealed fat glisten in an eerie light
As below them on the foaming deeps, float rafts of human shite
The rats that swim and dart about have coats that shine with health
For these cleaners-up of human filth there's a river load of wealth
Toilet paper streamers decorate the vaulted halls
And coloured plastic bags of trash, bob along in shiny balls
It's true that the aroma that pervades this world of gloom
Isn't quite the scent of flowers that you'd choose for your bedroom
But if your eye is tuned just right, and you look around with care
For a certain sort of poet there is beauty everywhere
A contest entry
- Write me the opposite!!!! by Ray Von.
550 points, ended September 12, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I wrote better than that one!!! by Tattboyspet.
800 points, ended September 28, 2007, 23 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - UnUuuSual: Poems that will make me go HOLY COW! by Angel Full Of Hurt.
1034 points, ended October 13, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congrats on the gold rophie you definatly desurved it, wonderful write here, Keep writting.
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Ha! This is great!
Great rhythm and rhyme! The poem flowed with ease and it offered great imagery! Very well done! (And what a topic!)
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Gold trophy winner Ooooh
Splashed with talent this poem...amazing...but i'll have to read all the poems...so wait and see...you might win another gold trophy..anyway, WELL DONE!!!
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Excellent. I was reading this, taking it all in, having a wee drink of my Pepsi until I get to the "human shite" line and I nearly spat me ginger all over the screen. One thing though, rats using condoms as surfboards was...strangely missing.
Great write and congrats on gold.
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What a WONDERFUL write about something that could be beautiful - thank you
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Exactly what I asked for!!! Excellent! And apart from making shite rhyme with light, I think its perfect!
The end rocks! its all good !
Thank you for entering
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Although less used shite is as old as shit (which is to say very old!) and is a perfect rhyme, but I did feel cheeky using it!
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yeah I know it was a perfect rhyme. I meant that it was cheeky
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You have bought a sight which most of us would rather not think about, vividly to life, fortunately there is no smell attached to this poem.
Good imagery and choice of words.
All the best in the contest.
Sue
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