I remember the first time I kissed you
Back then we were just kids
It killed me when you had to move
I thought it was something I did.
I didn't get to see you for years
And that just tore me apart
Thinking back it brings me tears
because you have always been my heart
I got to see you again some years ago
And i lost my innocence to you
After that no love you showed,
And yet again you had to move.
You finally came back into my life
But after the hard time i had,
It tore me apart to know you had a wife
but for you i always tried to be glad.
I've always remembered us growing up
Saying we would always be there for one another
But now we have both given up,
Yet we are still close like sister and brother
Author notes
well this really happend and is happening now...i made this poem for a contest though but it fits into two catagories...they are option 4 and 5
A contest entry
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675 points, ended September 14, 2007, 24 entries
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Comments
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great write.. very emotional and deep..
heres an edited version that makes it more in place with the rhythm and flow..
I remember the first time I kissed you
Back then we were just kids
It killed me when you had to move
I thought it was something I did.
I didn't get to see you for years
And that just tore me apart
Thinking back it brings me tears
because you have always been my heart
I got to see you again some years ago
And i lost my innocence to you
After that no love you showed,
And yet again you had to move.
You finally came back into my life
But after the hard time i had,
It tore me apart to know you had a wife
but for you i always tried to be glad.
I've always remembered us growing up
Saying we would always be there for one another
But now we have both given up,
Yet we are still close like sister and brother
... I've basically reworded your lines to make more since and to sound better. like i said, this is a great write and you dont have to change this i just thought you might like to know how great it could be. thanks for entering
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Very emotional and sad in a way,im sorry this is happening,it must be awful.But I really do like the poem,good effort.
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