Hi my name is Alice
Take a step into my palace
Hello Mr.Skeleton
Try some gelatin
Mr. Ghost
Dont touch the roast
Hi headless horseman
I see you got a tan
Wait what's that noise?
Be quiet you zombie boys
It's comming from upstairs
"I see two eyes shaped like pears!"
I declare
Is this a joke?
Wait I see a black cloak
I slowly climb the stairs
But I slip and fall down onto chairs
The cloaked figure moves toward me
I try to flee
But he grabs me and I wonder what he's going to do
He flings off his hood and yells "BOO!"
I laugh seeing it was my old ghost friend Lance
Everyone else at the party begins to dance
So we join the group of ghosts
We all put are cups up in toasts
For another scary halloween
And howls came from the wolverines
We finished the night off with the skeleton dance
And I just watched with Lance
Maybe next year
You may appear
With these words everyone dissapeared
Because the house's family neared
Maybe Next year...
Author notes
Option 6 12 years old just to let u no my name isnt really alice
A contest entry
- 15 and Under ONLY ~ Win A Gold Membership in our Halloween Contest! by Amunet Wolfbane.
6000 points, ended November 14, 2007, 55 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is really quite the tale you have written here. It pulls the reader in making them want to read more and that is a good thing in my opinion. You did well with the rhyme scheme also but a tad stumbling in a few places but nothing major to worry about
Thank you for entering the contest and the best of luck
Blessings
Bel
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This is quite a good story that you have written here
The rhymescheme is quite good, but I had the feeling that the rhyme made the flow of the poem a bit wobbly...
Anyway, I have found an oopsie in there:
Line 9: 'Whats' should be What's
Once again, you've done quite a great job with this
Thank you for entering the contest - and the best of luck
Leander -
Happy Halloween! This is very good and entertaining. You did pretty well on your rhyming there. I must admit it lost a bit of power towards the end but overall you did a great job on this one and I really got into the tale as I went along. Great job!
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LOL your name isn't really alice...
Wow what a great poem... mine has the same backgroung and border lol well... this really was a great write. I loooooved it! 
Very nice...
~Pandy~
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