In the dark shadows at night
Evil darkness...
Chokes the breath out of light
Eerie demons lurking hungrily there
With jagged claws and monstrous glares,
Deafening silence...
Sense spine chilling cold
As dark shadows embrace
Lost, lonely souls,
Plucked from the light
In dark shadows they wait
While demons of darkness
Determine their fate...
Admist sinner's lost souls
Forever must dwell
To be hounded and tortured
In a dark shadowy hell,
Sinners so vain, their soul they can't hide
Life's deeds they have kept hidden
So deep inside
Daylight soon fades...
Dark shadows loom in your sight
As demons search, to enslave evil souls and their might
We must conquer our fears
Of the dark demons of fright,
With souls full of goodness
When we walk the night
Then all these dark shadows
Will soon vanish from sight
Superimposed
By our souls radiant light~
Author notes
I usually write nature poetry
I don't know why this came out my life has been chaotic lately
This is just so dark for me
Written September 16th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Dark poems by XXxdarkangelXxX.
300 points, ended October 11, 2005, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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excellent presentation
You weave your words very well in this dark write Sis. I really like this part:
"Admist sinner's lost souls
Forever must dwell
To be hounded and tortured
In a dark shadowy hell,
Sinners so vain, their soul they can't hide
Life's deeds they have kept hidden
So deep inside"
I don't want to be in that situation. No way.
Great write Susan. You are so talented.
Ethereal Melody
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wow this was great...i really liked the emotion in it...great job
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I'm glad you were able to enter the contest, after hearing about it. This was definately the sort of different things that I was looking for. Thank you for following the rules of the conest, and trying something new!
Always keep writing!
-butterflyflight -
Looks like a winner to me!
Dark and mysteriously alluring! Well done! Good Luck in the contest, Sis!
< 3 Maureen
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to touch in those shadows where crimson words rage beyond thy blindness....
and the night keeps on howling!
I enjoyed the walk in thy darkness!
Keep penning on!
Bill -
mmmmmmmmmm, deliciously drk, sinister and sensual ..... brilliantly written in astyle which I know is no your normal genre ... Kudos my friend .... I wish you well ... you desrve to do well wth this piece .... Andy
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Now this I remember.. awesome image hun.. and words to match it!!! good luck with contest.. I see a winner here.. as this is definitely not your usual style at all
~GILL~xxx -
You always write so delicate Susan.. everything so pure
and Sweet.. So i thought this was just "AMAZING" when i read this
from You!.. Wonderful seduction and the ryhming flows so perfect
just pulls You in and won't let you go! Certainly a WINNER!
Good Luck! hon* This piece speaks for itself! the incredible' writing ability you have....Loved this!! Wonderful' Wonderful' job! 
~Mina~
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Susan
I read this one before too, and you did an amazing job
That picture, ouchies
Love ya,
Karen
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seems like i remember reading this one before too...
yeah, sometimes we're in a rather dark mood...
and our writing shows it...
but, still a very good write from you susan!
good luck in the contest!
blessed be
mike -
Susan , I remember reading this before . Even though it is good as far as dark writing goes , oh boy ----do I ever prefer your other writes But I am glad to see you branching out regardless and trying your hand at something different . But somehow the sweetness I see in your authorpic and this do not go together . You much better fit the image of nature and love writes
Reenie
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Stomps foot MORE!
"Then all these dark shadows
Will soon vanish from sight
Superimposed
By our souls radiant light~"
Masterful! Wonderful..insightful walk
along with this poem of truth and Hope..
and the power wehave to overcome our fears..
that demons within us..
*Darn your good!*
Edited on Sep 23, 7:17 because ''.
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