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a view

when i saw a sunrise from my window it was gorgeous.
i wish you could have been there and
we could've shared the sight together.
i'll describe it to you.
it was pretty. the warmth
and friendly glow painted my window full of color
and suddenly i felt like i made a new friend.
the deep red glow felt so raw- just like the
raw trust of someone close.

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  • detectivediana
    October 8, 2007

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    you made a new friend; that was my favourite part of the poem. i wonder though: what happens when the sun sets? is that when your friend, the sunrise, departs? and if so, where does he/she/it go? and when the sunrise returns, is it the one who rose earlier, or is it another being altogether? is it a family of sunrises, taking their turns to see the world, to leave their home for a bit? is it midnight turning out its lights?


  • debilynn gold member
    September 10, 2007

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    a beautiful expression of your emotions. this is a wonderful write. keep writing! God bless you always


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    September 9, 2007

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    this was a beautiful write which held so much emotion and imagery within it
    had that affectionate feeling to it. well done