I’ve not been where there is no pain
Or where the rained- on weathervane
Smiled above a tractor ride
As childhood left, taken in stride.
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I’ve not been there-that mountain rush
Where grasses drink rain to a slush
Or Canyon’s bowl filled up with sun
Reflecting light-a blinding one.
I’ve not yet seen where elders stay,
When once, as youth, had time to play,
Where babies ask why they should fall-
To help them think , and thus, recall.
I’ve not been lost in darkness’glare
(Least not for long, for God is there)
Some peace and calm to fit my pleas-
Now held in bliss, with all of these.
Whatever instant thrills we purge
Is heaven’s touch and finished urge,
For all the things not done on earth
Will, for His Grace, be all it’s worth!
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Written September 23rd, 2003
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Divine ...
I loved this poem. Reading it was a true blessing, as all your poems are to me. Thank you, my precious friend, for soothing my soul.
Love
Myra
(My computer is still not fixed ... but I am working steadily on Gained Loss ... ironic title, not so?)
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That was great. I honestly mean that. And thanks for the comment. So when you talk about editing, could you elaborate a little? Thanks.
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AWESOME
OMG THAT WAS SOOOO GOOD...I KNOW IM ONLY 15 AND TRTY TO WRITE BUT I CAN ONLY HOPE THAT AS U GROW OLDER I WILL LEARN AND IMPROVE MY WRITING TO SOMEDAY MOUNT TO YOUR WRITING SKILLS...I LOVED THIS POEM AND THANKS FOR THE ADVICE..WHEN I WAS WRITTING IT I WAS JUST WRITTING AS I WENT ALONG I NEVER REALLY EDIT THEM SO THANKS AGAIN ADN ILL TRY MY HEARDEST GOOD JOB KEEP WRITING YO!
SMEEK~! "POET73" -
When reading writes like this, I don't know whether God inspired someone so much that the words came out just right, or if God Himself felt the inspiration to jump into someone's soul, posses their bodies and produce a wonderment such as this (it happened to Handel, ay). Either way, I always find myself critiquing the words. STP
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beautiful. I thank you for writing the things you do, it touches my soul. I see the Lords love in your words. Maybe thats strange, but I do, and its like a refreshing glass of spiritual water
thanks
blueyes -
Superb poem! You can make imagery do so many things. i love this part especially:
I’ve not been there-that mountain rush
Where grasses drink rain to a slush
Or Canyon’s bowl filled up with sun
Reflecting light-a blinding one.
Great job and keep up the good work!
In Christ
Aragorn -
Greetings,
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Oh to find that place where there is nothing but you and God. You did a wonderful job of capturing a little of that in this. Even though we all go through pain it is nice to be reminded that at the end of the day it doesn't matter, all that matters is whether or not we are still at peace with God. Great write!
~Lise
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what would life be without people like you who remind us of the important things? I especially liked the first two lines of the second stanza and the next to the last stanza. You write so beautifully,
Cookie. -
Sometimes all one can find to say is "great write". Truthfully, nicely said Cookie. Overall, I can't imagine changing a thing. Then again, I'm not surprised to find such an excellent write amongst your pennings.
K. -
great write beautiful poem!
excellent concept!
keep up the great work
fanastic write
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What a great concept! And wonderfully brought forth as well. God gives us everything we need, yet still it can be easy to end up wanting more. Using your poem for reflection, its easier to see how much we really have.
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Yes Lord! I love the spiritually intuitive beat. I felt in my heart the truth of the poem. It has a quality of heaven on earth and being in the sun-drenched shadow of the All Mighty Creator. ET
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As always, Di, your love of the Lord comes shining through your words. Yes, the rewards come later, and his grace shines a light bright enough for all of us to find our way. Great picture, Di, I imagine its one of your own, yes? Thank you for such a serene write. I love it.
~ becky
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looks like you've found truth within your own heart!
*smiles*
Some of us ARE still looking!
I did enjoy!
Keep penning on my friend!
Bill -
I’ve not been lost in darkness’glare
(Least not for long, for God is there)
Some peace and calm to fit my pleas-
Now held in bliss, with all of these
This speaks for itself. I truly enjoyed -
ATC ( All things considered...THANK you.)
.."Honestly that doesn't make alot of sense either. I'm not sure if you're saying the things you don't do on earth you get rewarded for in heaven" <---- closer to what I meant.
Actually, for His Grace is the pending value to what is willingly surrendered on earth. So it's all in the mix of things.
Edited on Oct 02, 1:58 because ''. -
I never trust a smiling weathervane.
For all the things not done on earth
Will, for His Grace, be all it’s worth.
This made no sense.
Suggestion:
-will with his grace portray their worth.
Honestly that doesn't make alot of sense either. I'm not sure if you're saying the things you don't do on earth you get rewarded for in heaven...or if you're saying everything you don't get to do here, you get to do there. But...I think this works right up until the very end. I think you should cap it off with a brilliant line though, which would drive the point home.
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Dearest Dianne -
A wonderful, seamless, serene write! Lovely descriptive imagery; beautiful flow, rhythm, flawless end rhyme, alliteration and assonance. Superbly written, perfect voice, Classic Supreme, CookieZeal!
Thank you for sharing your awesome talent, with its deep spiritual message.
Love
Myra -
Very nice, smooth flowing poem..... it's a ZealClassic! Again! I'm not into rhyme much yet when I read yours, it doesn't bother me.... in fact, it works for me. You use it so naturally.... unobtrusive...... without effort. You keep a continuity of storyline and manage to remain fluid in your rhyme scheme. Very nicely done again.........
Monk -
tis' wonderful for sure. ye canna help but be moved for this no matter what walk of life ye are on. och, this is one of thoes rare private moments i think that ye find, like whispers in your heart, and seeping outward, pushing through clouds of dispare, ack to the purest form of self.
i love the quiet, unasumeing way ye wrote this, weaveing not pressing. tis' well done indeed.
arden -
Fantastic
Girl.........I just don't know how you can come up with such marvelous stuff! You are a treasure for sure. -
we all are trying to find a place of solitude i think ... its a beautiful poem and i really like it thank you for sharing it with us .. left me speachless
...Honorablyfallen -
Excellent
Even the most hardened cynic could not fail to be moved by this, Cookie. Much love and appreciation, it is wonderful.
The picture is really amazing too, what a sky! Is it a personal one?
Lines that got to me:
I’ve not been there-that mountain rush
Where grasses drink rain to a slush
That's so good you can almost taste it. You really know how to put words together.
Congratulations on another sublime piece. Your page is always a real treat!
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I have not been where the angles sing
where the ocean is but a roar
and the coyote howls no more
without all the tears and pains of life
would we ever need our Lord?
for the justice found in his heavenly gates
of mercy and grace
will be here forevermore,,,,
awaiting our taking, for He loves us so....
Tamara -
" Whatever instant thrills we purge
It’s heaven’s touch and finished urge,
For all the things not done on earth
Will, for His Grace, be all it’s worth!"
This part wraps it up well. Wasn't sure where this was going and then, wham, I was there. This developed well into the final stanza with a natural rhyme and rhythm to it. Nicely penned.
Monk -
Cookie this is beautiful flowed really nicely tight clipped from start to finish I saw in this. Shows that through the blessings and pain the Lord is always there even in the unknown changes of what hasn't been.....And when the Lords in those things there is always good from it.......Love and hugs, Sherry
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Hmm. Religion will always confuse me, and i will always be glad for those who can reconcile themselves to it enough to believe it. Its a beautiful poem. And it has a lot of good emotion in it. A good write.
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