My brother how you've suffered, I've felt your pain,
I know its a constant reminder, time and time again.
You never felt wanted or loved, they just sent away,
To become a man by yourself, to walk a narrow road, and not stray,
Never knowing why, what did you do wrong,
why weren't you good enough, trying to be strong,
Crying at night , voicing anguish, rage and fears,
nobody to listen, never reaching their ears, you suffered.
you could never make enough money, or drink enough,
to make you forget, that you weren't loved,
I loved you, and missed you, and thought of you,
you were always spoken of, before my prayers were through,
Our parents loved you too, they were always proud of you,
they just didn't have the words,but I swear its true,
release your burden, at the cross, leave your pain,
find your wifes' arms, and share her love, be alive again,
Forgive , don't live in the past, your future waits,
Today is all we have, and the world we create.
Please tell me what you think
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sad tribute to a brother you love....
I am sorry for your loss, Jesse. I can feel so much love flowing through your pen with this. I am sure your brother has read every word.
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A very sad, emotional piece. I felt that I could see your pain being played out. There a few a typos, and you might want to re-read this and find them.
"wifes arms, and share her love, be alive again,
Forgive , don't live, in the past, your futures waits"
'wifes' should have an apostrophe. The comma after 'don't live' is unnecessary, and 'future' does not need an 's'.
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i liked it alot but you have a few grammar mistakes and it would be a better write if it were in stanzas but I loved it anyway...
murnt moocow
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