Dance with his emotions
Father that you are
Playing with words
Scrabble the mind
User to your means
Grey edged sword
Penetrates deep within
Lick the wounds of defeat
I play a role here
A Mother's love for her son
I have picked up the pieces
Of what you left behind
His illness is none believing
Of that you are so sure
Live his life I dare you
Before your judgment drawn
Pawn on a chessboard
Move him left
Now right
Your game tortures all
Bottle up his feelings
Entrap within a web
Sigh that is so painful
Tears to prick the eyes
Bitter is your lemon twist
Bite an acid tongue
Laced poison dribbles
A sheer mention of my name
Angered you seek revenge
But what I ask is the cost ?
Enemy fire shot with desire
Now the battles lost
I have my proof don't worry
Paint egg upon your face
For very soon dear man
You will have me as your ex
Stop before you falter
Isolated by your means
Greed will be your downfall
Of your financial means
Author notes
To all of those who battle over finances and use a child to their own bitter means
In a list
A contest entry
- Family Disappointments by aboomer.
525 points, ended April 14, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Marriage-Wreck by Perfect Insanity.
850 points, ended November 17, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is raw, and powerful, Julie.
Using children for financial gain, shouldn't be done. Exploitation of youth and innocence....
There is a lot of bitterness and anger in this piece.
You are a gifted writer, and allowing the reader into your mind like this, is a rare treat.
Bravo
'D' (Scott)
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Oh. The way you executed this piece is so powerful. I truly felt this one in my heart and soul. The combination of words you have used here are so very sad and hurtful.
It still angers and exasperates me to know of how some individuals use a child's mind to get what they want. It is cruel, unfair and unloving. He is clearly blinded with revenge. I think what really made this poem, was your attitude and pain towards it.
You took a strong stance here:
"I have my proof don't worry
Paint egg upon your face
For very soon dear man
You will have me as your ex"
This implied so much and it showed a lot of your character. Greed and unthoughtful doings will most definitely be his fall. I hope in the end, all ends well. Good luck ♥ -
wow Mum this is very intense, powerful & there is a strong message behind it.. It's a terrible thing to do to anyone. using a child like a pawn in a game of chess, but in life instead. You did an outstanding job with this poem. to think a parent is low enough to do suck a thing, is disgusting..
Congratulations on the HM..
I Love You
kat
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wow - a very powerful write! So vivid in emotion, images and wording!
Well done!
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This gave me goosebumps! It's so powerful hun.
How anyone can use a child as a pawn is beyond me. And where is the compassion? The motto I have fits perfectly here: "don't judge me till you've walked a day in my shoes" .. yet people should have empathy and compassion!!
Sigh.. you're right, this hasn't changed at all has it?
Oustanding write!
♥
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Wow!!! That was deep...
It is a sad day when people try to use their children as weapons against ex's, as I'm finding out slowly...
Another fantastic & heartfelt write that didn't fail to move me...
Well done!!!
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wow, how did i miss this?! its so powerful, the emotion really hits, he will get his just deserves, it will hurt to many people along the way, but eventually he will get what is coming to him hun,
take care
love millie
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Such a common story these days, sadly, but your venting may be of help to yourself and others. I notice you left plenty of room for updates as they occur.
Good for you for putting up such a good fight.
Well done on the Honorable Mention.
Don
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Hard times coming, lots of bitterness and vindictiveness. Described in detail.
jjj
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Love your wording in this - very powerful and heartfelt! And your title is very fitting....right on! I am astonished, and so sad, when I see this happening - children used as pawns. Like their marriage was a game and never had anymore meaning than that....the children were just effective means to an end. I wish it wasn't so - but it is, and you did very well depicting this.
thank you for your entry
best wishes
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This is a wonderfully written piece. The love you have for your son shines thorugh. Well done! Best of luck in the contest.
Crystal
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A very powerful and emotional piece of work sister. So many people find themselves having to deal with this. It sickens me how an adult will use a child.
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This is so true. Powerful words indeed. How many so-called parents have done this?
Deep and truthful writing, Julie.
Very well-written indeed.
Love
Wayne Leon
xx
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The love of your son is astounding in this piece. Your x will pay for what comes around goes around.
You will prevail and my heart wishes you and your family all of the best.
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Thank you xxxx
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so dam sad
yup says loads though, but im sure u will fight hard
go get um girl !
abe
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So true and so sad
Think about it in todays times the debters feed upon us like vultures then the government comes in for their share with what little that is left enjoy life if you dare . I am the typw that could move to the country and live in a tent and live off the land . I need not a TV although I would miss my computor but if it meant stress to the point of a heart attack I would give it all up for the beauty and peace from a strlite night and the music of the crickets about . Life is truly what we make it to be . And what could you do without in all that you see .
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OMG! this one gave me chills... long lasting ones (like they're still on me as I write~) Good choice of topic and effectively presented!
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Slam bang whooomph ... strong emotions and a hard stroy
well written
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