Swirls of yellow and blue
In a midnight hour
Hands interlaced as
We stroll in the darkness
Moon illuminating
Our faces when twinkling
eyes meet, waiting for
That fateful, exciting first
And when our lips meet
It is beautiful
Author notes
Freeverse: I come out and say what I mean in love poems, not because I do not have the tools for my poems to be one big metaphor, but I choose to voice my feelings.
Love: Capturing a first kiss under the moonlight
In a list
A contest entry
- Pre-Write Mania by Chelsea Void.
600 points, ended October 1, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - There's A First Time For Everything by Asylaarix.
600 points, ended September 21, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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That kiss has sure been captured ... you described it so well in your piece ... short, sweet, and to the point ... very well written ... I love when ppl write their feelings down in poetry ... because I feel that is exactly what poetry is ... feelings ... very well done and good luck in the contest ...
Chantelle -
I like the simplicity and the fact that though you were crystal clear with the scene, you didn't give a rushed blunt feeling.
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Thank you
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