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The pain you bring in

The pain is gone
you don’t bother me
things are in perspective
you can come here.
Why not?
It’s our life
stagnant
luckless
no want  nor dream
for the heart to take flight.

Confident
you survive.
Bravely
without apology
you stay stuck
in  deep
continue to                                                                       
disrupt my routine.

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  • Deindichter
    September 8, 2007
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    This piece has a lot of ideas that are introspective, I'm not sure if I follow the story completely, however, the piece is strong in its passion and voice. Your usage of choppy lines lets the ideas be as direct as possible and add an interesting dynamic. Well done, I hope whatever hurt inspired this or inspires this subsides soon.