Mommy I wish I could give you the moon and the stars
And if I had a long rope I would give you mars
Maybe then you would have loved me
And wouldn't have made me an adoptee
And then I wouldn't spend nights crying
Feeling like I was dying
And I would never have had my heart broken
And this poem would never have been spoken
If I only gave you the moon and the stars...
Author notes
True story... Actually I have been atached to looking at the moon and the stars ever since i was little even though my adopted mom would never let me I liked to just stare at them my friend even made a joke out of it because of how my eyes change colors alot of times they turn green at night and I feel like im watching the stars at the same time my mom is by the way im 12
A contest entry
- Ages 13 and Under ONLY ~ The Moon and Stars by Amunet Wolfbane.
300 points, ended September 22, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Mommy I love you!!! by Dancing the Rumba.
850 points, ended February 12, 2008, 21 entries
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Great Write
good job... your mom probably loves you its just maybe she wasn't ready.. you know my mom wanted to put me up for adoption but didn't cuz my dad but i don't get along with my mom and sometimes i wish my mom had given me up
maybe she made the right choice? just a thought 
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I really feel sad now. I love your poem! You should look at the moon and stars more often, like Amunet says. VERY SWEET!
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I do love to look at the stars and I am the athletic type so I love to run during the night even if I not allowed to that often
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I Can really feel the sadness of the heart in this piece. I know it's not easy but try to think of it this way, perhaps it was not that your mom didn't love you, but more she couldn't take care of you and wanted you to be safe. I don't know the deal there, but sometimes things are not as they seem
But I love your poem and it really is moving and lovely. You should look at the moon and stars often, I find it really soothes the soul 
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Loveley
very nice emotion
I like the part where you wrote And then I wouldn't spend nights crying
Feeling like I was dying
i thought it was a nice metaphor.good luck in the contest -
Nice poem. You really bring out the emotion
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