I want to die because I ate too much chocolate.
I want to die of exhaustion because I dance all night long.
I want to die because I drank too much beer and Tequila.
I want to die because I partied too hard.
I want to die because I loved too much.
I want to die because you hugged me too hard.
I want to die because I had too many children.
Because I gave my grandchildren everything they would ever need.
I want to die because I ate too much hot sauce.
I want to die because I had too much success.
I want to die when God tells me,
But not today,
And not because I have HIV.
Author notes
HIV
A contest entry
- FOR FIVE TROPHIES OR LESS by Swan song.
450 points, ended September 9, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Something Amazing by So Strange.
950 points, ended September 25, 2007, 18 entries
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450 points, ended October 23, 2007, 43 entries
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850 points, ended October 29, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - oogaboogashoogalooga...this is serious by Starlette.
525 points, ended December 7, 2007, 150 entries
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3000 points, ended August 26, 2008, 1668 entries
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"Rule 2: this has to be a real event that has happened to you or to someone very close. you have to have been emotionally changed because of it" As this piece is not in conjuction with the above, it will not be considered for a placement. The piece as a whole however, is interesting, a little depressing, but interesting all the same.
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Woah amazing it really catches the readers attention
Good Luck in contest! -
Wow. Suprise ending that's for sure. I never would have guessed. But, keep your head up and live life to the fullest! Great job!
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okay, death is not the answer, trust me
life and living it one day at a time
is what you and everyone else, yes me too
need to do, for this is all we have
Riftkin -
This shock effect worked well in this poem and the content really hit home. This is a very good poem and I thank you for entering my contest.
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