Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

As Flowers Wilt, Wings Are Broken










~

Isolation is beauty,
when fluttering fragility

is crushed.

Petite stature sighing,
embracing darkened breath

whence the star of life

dies.

~










A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 6 of 6

  • whatever girl
    September 8, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    i always wonder how all of you can write such good poetry in 20 words
    this one as well is sooo good
    much luck in contest


  • Andrew Timothy
    September 8, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Whoa, that was depressing. Lol, it was done really well, too.
    So, I'm guessing that because she's dying, she's isolated, correct?
    Wonderful job, Asfand.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    September 8, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    wow
    just wow
    this was absoulty breaht taking
    it was beautifully written
    i loved it well done and best of luck


  • Namita
    September 8, 2007
    Edit | Reply
    oops forgot

  • Namita
    September 8, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Wonderful penning, amazing write and good luck in the contest!!

    Candy~

1 - 6 of 6