Her world seemed
So simple
Black and white
A world with out color
Of day
And of Night
Then she began to wonder
How she should feel
The abstractness of
Her dwelling
Could it be real?
With tears
She felt with horror
What isn’t there?
She feels something missing
And shudders
In
Despair
In Darkness
She is whole
Who could see?
In light her parts were stripped
She saw in
Misery…
To build her
"Self"
Back up
To fill inside
She ate all the things she could
All that she
Could
Find
But in the light things remained
Machinery bereft
So she climbed
Into
the dark
To
Shelter
What was left
Author notes
Painting is Titled: Her Former Self
© Scott Hutchison
http://www.scotthutchison.com/
In a list
A contest entry
- Her Former Self by Pamela A Lamppa.
5000 points, ended September 9, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congratulations on the HM, I haven't checked out the other entries but I'm sure already that you deserved more than a green! Great job, I was very moved emotionally by this, it made me think of Sara, and the way she's feeling right now as she tries to find herself again after Basic, and this past weekend, so I can only hope that both the woman in the painting, and Sara, find whatever they are missing... Great write!
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i love the painting and i absolutely love, love, love your poem to go with it! i hope you win homes
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i loved the end "But in the light things remained
Machinery bereft
So she climbed
Into
the dark
To
Shelter
What was left"
as in trying to perserve what emotional stability she had left she went back into the dark that hid her imperfections..that picture is really cool..really beautiful and interesting in a sad way....to make sure i am right i think it's observing the emotional world of a bulimic..but i could be wrong if that's what it's doing it really is a stunning way to do so
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This poem literally gave me chills at the end- the words are simple but the meaning behind them is so strong and powerful...and the image really helps set the poetry in to it's emotional spiral. Great write!!!
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Wow, this was beautiful. I like the picture that goes along with it. Your words were very well expressed and full of emotions. Sometimes we look at a person and judge them on simplicity and how we assume their lives are just black and white like you mentioned. Yet, without knowing someone or getting to know someone, they could be dealing with a rough life and personal issues. You could never tell by looking at them. Loved the lines "In Darkness
She is whole
Who could see?
In light her parts were stripped
She saw in
Misery…" Wonderful write yet again!!
Bella
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