daddy is an owl
belly full of lemming bones
-shadow on the stars
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wink-gs
In a list
A contest entry
- good night moon by Cat.
750 points, ended September 10, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - enter your best poem, prewrites allowed :) by sillysmile.
400 points, ended November 8, 142 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
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haha i enjoyed the originality of this poem, is there a particular reason you chose to write this?
any certain inspiration?
to be fair to you i'm not sure i fully understand your intention
please feel free to enlighten me.
hmmm, i can hardly say im an expert on haiku's and i truly do appreciate you showing me this
also thankyou for entering this contest and goodluck
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Actually this poem was to tease my daughter (who is also on Allpoetry).
For whatever reason she was opening my "session" on our computer and accessing the AP site through my "Toolbar" (why was never explained to me)...so when I opened AP: her page came up...so I posted this poem on her page to let her know I'd had access to her page that had been left on several times without her logging out...
The "daddy" is in reference to the Sylvia Plath poem, which is one of her favorites.
I was the Owl, the mysterious shaddow on her webpage...
Actually she was a bit ticked off and moved the poem back to my page.
Does that answer the question, my Ausie Friend?
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Enjoy it I did...
Thank you.
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Best haiku i've ever read.
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gadzooks! thanx for the compleemint!
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Good use of sibilance here. I liked this piece, it was a good haiku Congrats on the bronze.
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Excellent haiku.. excellent for any genre!
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oh this is great! allpoetry book project? Working on a book? I want a signed copy!!! Have Jane sign it too!
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belly full of lemming bones
How is it that you can make something as disgusting as that into pure poetry?
The force is strong with this one...
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This certainly paints a picture of an owl hunting an night by the light of the moon - congratulations on taking bronze in this contest. Lovely haiku.
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very strong imagery
for just three lines... as strong as I have ever witnessed in haiku!
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wonderful haiku
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this is fabulous- i have never ever been a fan of haiku- but you've really given the form some life- i do like
belly full of lemming bones
nicely done- nice to see you around and about again
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Jane... O Jane.... tis so good to see you write ... and to say that he is a wise old bird... he might have swallowed the freeflying lemming/children and kept them whole... but yes yes
this bird loves this owly plume/ku
nice
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verry good,
best of luck in the contest
peace and love
john
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Nice Haiku!
Great line, 'belly full of lemming bones'
Good luck in the contest!
PJ
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