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I'm worth more than That.

Don't play those mind games,
Saying you'll gonna love me,
I've seen how you can be,
You and your debauchery.

I'm not using new words,
Just so you can understand.
I'm a precious rose,
Prettier than your cheap gold band.

I hold myself in high regard,
I have self esteem,
When you say those mean things,
I know your not worth me.

I have the highest standards  
As It should only really be,
It only goes to show, I'm a real lady.
I'm not giving myself away,
Like a prized pig,
To the highest bidder,
He better shove that ring up his.

I'm me, and I want better than that,
I want a love that will last,
Right up in the future,
And even through the past.

I want a hand to hold forever,
Forever in my grasp.
I want him never to say never,
And shed actual tears when I pass.

I'm not glass,
Fragile and breakable,
Though I am very shakable.

I'm a woman and I'm perfectly capable,
Of seeing through your little act,
So go pack your bags,
Or you'll scream like you never have.

 'Cause I know, I'm worth more than that. 

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I hate how some woman just give themselves away, and have no self respect. I'd rather live a life without being married, than be married and miserable. That's just the way I see it.

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  • ikeiloveyou
    May 15, 2008
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    wow i realy liked it and i understand completely waht your getting at..it was a realy good write


  • ucancallmereal
    May 10, 2008

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    woah that was amazing. this was so deep.. i myself have thought about those things a lot, you just spectacularly worded it =P anyways great job!!


  • Arsenic-
    October 23, 2007

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    I do like the poem. The fourth stanza threw me because you were into a rythem for the first three. You also changed the rhyme scheme. The first stanza was abbb, second abcb...then later it became abab. The seventh stanza (the short one) worked very well since it was obviously a breaking point, and had its own scheme. You probably wern't going for structure, but it was so close that it would have read smoother if you nailed that aspect. Either way, great use of words and message.


  • ListentotheSilence
    October 14, 2007

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    I liked this one. Nice play on womanly strength! And it even rhymes....with an important hidden moral to not be easily pleased with cheap boys.


  • luna-midnight gold member
    October 10, 2007
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    hahahah love this so much
    i luahged so hard, you are so right
    i hate those whores, lol
    and you for sure are worth more than anything, hahahha your priceless!
    GGGOOO YOOUUUU ( more cheering, lol )
    but nice flow and loved it
    great job
    stephanie =]


  • Silenced Tears
    September 8, 2007
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    Great write! This poem reminds me of ... this thing I just forgot about... oh well... Hm... you know what I think? I think that when you wrote that, you didn't really care if it would rhyme... if I'm right, because I'm not, then Let me tell you, you are GREAT!


  • Yuki Now and Always
    September 8, 2007
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    Very im pressed by this.That was very awsome, in wording and in message. good job!


  • nichtmich silver member
    September 8, 2007
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    WOW!!! I am impressed with your language, your style and your attitude! You go girl. There's nothing wrong with standing strong on your own two feet. This is so much better than "he doesn't love me, I'm gonna cry forever." I hope you find exactly what you're hoping for, you deserve it. Great read.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    September 7, 2007

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    Wow your a kid This is a very good write. Im impressed.And your riht their is a serious problem about giving up ones self before marriage. Thanks for sharing best wishes


  • jusaliltrubl
    September 7, 2007
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    Totally With You!

    makes more sense than I have heard for a long time! great write

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