Slamming the door behind me,
locking it with a soft click,
tears are streaming down my face,
blinding me as they fill my eyes.
I feel lightheaded as I collapse
upon the bed, I feel as if
I am falling through the Dark Abyss.
Falling,
falling,
no one can save me now.
My pillow is saturated by
my tears, my head is buried
in the damp cloth.
Nothing can comfort me.
I feel so empty inside,
I feel so alone.
Crying silently in the dark,
tears are falling like raindrops.
Don't console me with your
meaningless words,
my hollow heart won't listen.
Don't you dare try lying to me,
I can tell it from the truth.
Drowning,
drowning
in a sea of my own tears.
I feel so dead now,
a hole is where my heart should be.
I can't take this anymore,
my world is black as night.
So sick of false empathy,
I don't accept any pity.
Leave me with my sorrow,
leave me in my dark room.
Alone and crying in the shadows,
I am so icy, so bitter from this life.
I don't want this pain,
it makes me sick to the core.
Falling,
falling
to my death.
Author notes
Broken.
In a list
A contest entry
- The tears, they flow free, Reminding me of who I used to be. by Freakish-Lizzie.
435 points, ended September 25, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - feelings by crystallynnbradford.
390 points, ended September 15, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critique?
Comments
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very well done
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Well what Can I say. I like this. I like the ending.. keeps the reader hanging on and in a way wishing for more. Your work is very deep and very easy to relate to good luck in my contest.
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Amazed
Love the emotions portrayed..I can most certainly relate. I love it! -
Wow! Absolutly deep! I REALLY FEEL RELATED TO THIS! I felt like you were telling me how you feel directly to my face! I LOVE IT!!!
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