Lullaby, sweet serenade
We watch the evening glory fade
Amber shadows fall and play
Between the bowing trees that sway.
You and I, we laugh and talk
Together through the meadow walk
Shady paths are ours to share
Soft melodies ring through the air.
Little birds with sleepy eyes
Flutter down from cinnamon skies
Huddled in their feathered nests
Tucked away in the treetop's crest.
You and I, we sit and dream
Watch the water flow downstream
Skylark sings her tune until
The sun has left and the day is still.
Crickets echo on the breeze
Fading sun creeps through the trees
A dusky blanket steals the blue
As we gaze into the skyline' s hue.
Nature tells a wondrous story
Warm whispers speak of evening glory
Amber shadows stop their play
Till the sun breaks through another day.
Author notes
Option 2
In a list
A contest entry
- Open Door (must Vote) by Legend.
2000 points, ended September 19, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 2 for You by Scion.
700 points, ended February 1, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Seasonal Love. by Poetryintheblood.
525 points, ended March 1, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Absolutely beautiful! I can close my eyes and see the image you painted with words.
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OH! I do love this splendid poem!
All lines spark imagery that is elegant and beautiful. 
Thank you so much for allowing me to post this wonderful poem on Poetry Planet. 
You will be the guest poet two days running, starting tomorrow. 
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Thank you, thank you, thank you! you are very kind
Shaz xx 
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I love nature...and love it more when someone can make it sing a song...touching the essensense of inner preservations...this is delightful as much filled with beautiful images....sailing on a breeze...we all wish to be..
Mal
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Thank you very much for such kind comments on my work.
Shaz xx
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An other beautiful written piece. I love nature to make a long walk with the dog or a long ride on my bike. Sunrise and sunfall are my favorite moments when the sunrays playing with the other colours that the tile of the year provide.
Good luck in the contest
Herman
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Your depiction of a beautiful sunset is quite breathtaking. Imagery is spot on and brings a warm glow to the reader. This was a joy to read.
All the best in the contest...Sue
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Beautifully visual with your perfect rhyme. Oh this is such a tough contest. How on earth do we pick gold from gold? Amazing this. Simply amazing. Best of luck. ~Pamela
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beautiful!
Such lovey shades of morning in this
Best wishes!
Lynda
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Softness and imagery of late light
thread your work magically.
Beautiful resonance.
Best wishes for this piece of verse.
Lyndon.
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Another one of my favorites. Beautifully written as always. ~ Sue
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Another beautiful and soft piece. You have such a talent for drawing the reader into your phrases - I love, love, love the "cinammon sky". Simply charming.
e~
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You certainly have a way with meter and rhyme...in fact, some of the best I've read on this site. Again, another lovely write
Ruth
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Ruth...thank you so very much for your lovely, kind and encouraging words. and for the kind applause. I really appreciate them.
Shaz xx
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a delightful and colorful canvas of beauty found in nature and metaphorically in our inner nature ... perfect meter adding to the flow of this piece of art ...
maa
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So descriptive
Again another fine entry into this contest. Chock full of descriptive illustrations in your words.
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welcome back good luck in the contest
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brilliant
i loved this piece, well done.
you made me feel as though i was in the countryside - superb, best wishes your friend tony yates -
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Tony...Thank you so very much for your kind comments, and also for adding me to your favourites, I really appreciate it.
Shaz xx
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck, Josie
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I really like this. It paints a beautiful picture of evening and takes me there with you. I am pulled into the scene.
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This is such a beautiful poem full of breathtaking imagery..Flows like silk.. One of my favorites in the contest.. Bravo.. well done
Good luck and thanks so much for sharing with us
Keep writing
Razz
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Loved the poem. It sent so much imagery to me as I read this piece. Great flow and rhythm. You truly have a way with rhyme. Wonderful write and good luck
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Thank you for your entry. Well, I have nothing really to critique, but only to conragulate you on your wonderful use of imagery. I like this simple rhyme scheme; it works perfectly with this poem. You bring such a light and airy feel with the words you use. I am content with this because of it's quaint and innocent feel. I will keep this in mind when I judge on Friday. Again, thank you for entering. Good luck and cheers.
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I will be the first to admit I do not care for rhyming poetry HOWEVER I will give credit where it is rightfully due and that my dear is right HERE! This is an amazing piece of poetry in imagery, message, flow, rhyme and over all masterpiece in my humble opinion. Definatley a work of art deserving of much recognition. Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you!
Blessings
Bel
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That's a gorgeous picture! The poem itself is gorgeous as well; your rhymes are fresh, not forced, and actually mean something. There were a couple of places in which the metre felt off (last line of the first stanza, "cinnamon" in the second line of second stanza), but the jolts in the flow were minimal. Also, you've done a lovely job with imagery!
I'm impressed. You're a finalist for sure!
Stay well,
Cristina
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Congratulations Princess
on your lovely golden award, well deserving of, such a beautiful write..Have a most wonderful Autumn day, Ken IBT
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Long time since I read such RICH poetry.. This leaves me wonderstruck.. I awe.. It reads well and leaves the reader at ease.. with the rhyme so well flowing.. Very well done.. Cant expect a greater write !!!!
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great write!
easy flowing, very vivid imagery ,I felt like I was there.
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Very picturesque, nice write.
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Oh.. I was slightly thrown off by your rhyme scheme when I got to the second stanza.. but I'm good now!! This was very pretty! simple clear, understandable! thanks so much for sharing!
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So simple and plain pictures, yet so nice written and composed poem like a very rare and precious painting. With perfect rhyme you framed it gold.
~Sonja~
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Oh my....
flutter down from cinnamon skies
a dusky blanket steals the blue,
Skylark sings her tune until the sun has left and day is still....
OH my.
What wonderful imagery. My dear, I dare say you have stolen my soul with this piece. Wonderful perfect rhyme. Absolutely stunning.
~Pamela
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OH this is so nice to read and indeed rhyming is great,makes me want to practice my rhymes more good luck...MM
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good
i liked its warmth. the discriptions were good. my favorite lines were - little birds birds with sleepy eyes flutter down from cinnamon skies. good poem
jingle
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this is a great piece
written with great flow and ryhme that is sooo unforced.
It takes the reader on this walk of serene imagery and meaningful thoughts of calm. very lovely write
good luck in the contest
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Good morning Princess what a beautiful walk through your poem, more like a waltz on a beautiful day with nature. Your images are beautiful, full of life and color to the naked eye. Your rhyming is wonderful as is the flow of this wonderful escape. Wishing you the best in the contest. May your day be as lovely as the painting you have graced us with, Ken IBT
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nature's serenity...
...captured in your words in this beautiful poem. There is no doubt that it is a work of art, with its flow and its rhyme and its evocative, vivid imagery.
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Shaz what do you really expect me to say I have said everything before about your work. You have a way with words and phrases that others could use but never do. A wonderful entry as ever Thank you Good luck in the contest
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Oh what a lovely dreamy poem. It's like a lullaby. Favorite bit: cinnamon skies, but I love all of it. Good luck
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