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*Our Breath*

Im so tired
Im so very tired
I just wanna lay down
Lay down in my bed and rest
Rest in your arms
Wraped around me so tightly
With your breath upon my face
Staring deep into your eyes
Looking ever so beautiful
As you place your right hand
On my left thigh
Whispering sweet love in my ear
As you kiss my lips down to my neck
Bodys pressed up against one another
Sweat pouring off our bodys
Breathing heavy
Not being able to catch our breath......

not done but thought you can give me ideas

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  • FlipperSwitch
    September 8, 2007
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    Beautiful simplicity I think


  • Lunatyx
    September 7, 2007

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    Good one !

    I like the poem, as I was reading it I thought it was a love poem like many others...
    But I think there`s a deeper meaning to it, then it first appears. The last line changes everything to me, it gave me the impression that you meant how we only have a few special and precious moments to ourselves. And that everything else happens in rush where there`s no time to catch your breath...

    I may have thought too serious or too deep about it, but the punch line is - I like it

    Keep it up

    Greets