Sun glistens through amber leaves,
breeze rustling through the trees.
We need to stop, take the time,
for our worlds beauty is sublime.
A contest entry
- Everchanging (PIC CONTEST!) by AgoniesQueen.
575 points, ended September 10, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very nice write
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This was brillant but what was even better is when you told the dude you couldnt even name one poet hahaha!!!
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A lovely message summed up into four lines. Despite the truthfullness of the earlier comment you recieved, it was still short and sweet.
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Sorry I had no idea! I've only been writing and reading poetry for 3 weeks so very much the newbie.
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Let me encourage you then; your poetry is very good, you are able to do what I usually cannot, and that is easily conveying your emotion through the poetry. If you ask me, I reckon you would flog my socks anyday
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Wowzer....Really...? I'll let you into a secret...I can't even name one poet, thats how much I know. I am enjoying it tho, a lot. There are a lot of talented people out there including yourself!
Pink x
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Try to remember that the word sublime gets overused in poetry. Good poem, but maybe try and use a different word. Love the imagery in the first two lines.
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