Friendship can be a wonderful thing,
makes life shine, whatever it may bring.
We take in turns, being there,
sob, laugh, rejoice and share.
Your the best friend I ever had,
I was there when you buried your dad.
Picked up the pieces of your broken heart,
helped you out with your fresh start.
Then your husband up and left,
you came to me all bereft.
once again I helped you out,
as thats what friendship is all about.
I thought my husband had an affair,
now it was your turn to be there.
It drove me crazy over the weeks,
the truth I knew I had to seek.
What I found felt so unreal,
my man you had tried to steal.
You had broken the ultimate rule,
and tried to make me look the fool.
Not only did my marriage end,
but I lost you, my so called friend.
In tears I asked why you would,
you said simply 'because I could'.
Ever since that fateful day,
my trust has remained locked away.
Never again will I let it return,
for friendships now I do spurn.
Author notes
Option 3, from personal experience.
A contest entry
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Wow!!!This is so sad and deep and intense. So very well written. You ought to have whipped both of thei asses
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In tears I asked why you would,
you said simply 'because I could'
Do you know that this is the reason for all evil in the world - that is I mean from the agressors perspective. George Orwell wrote, why do people abuse power: 'because they can' - NO OTHER REASON. It's so very sad.
You describe so much an experience I went through in my twenties - but the truth never got known (literally only by me) because the situation was so twisted. I wonder if that happened here? If it happens in all evil situations. It's very sad.
I hope you have found a way to get past the pain. There is a way to trust again, but you must take it slow, and carefully, and if you do, you will find those who 1) don't mind and aren't offended that you don't trust them 2) allow you to trust them one inch at a time 3) once those inches build up, and they still haven't betrayed your truth, you will discover that you actually do have people around you that you CAN trust.
These are the kind of people you can solidly trust. Anyone who demands your trust be careful of.
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great write..... good luck!
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This was so true. It dazzled me in the end...If I hadn't known that this was for a contest where something actually WENT wrong, in the first part, I said it was a true friendship poem. Which, I think, was exactly the point: making the reader realise the way you felt for your ex "best friend".
"Picked up the pieces of your broken heart,
helped you out with your fresh start."
Such a beautiful part of the poem - My favorite!!!
I was so sad, in the end. I was like... "Oh my God..how...how COULD she?" I swear that if I was near her, I would've slapped her(it really was that powerful-either that, either I have anger management issues, LOL). Very strong emotion, into a nice poetic form. Congratulations, and good luck in the contest!
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Damn, finding out about what your best friend and husband have been doing for probably a long time is a giant stab to the heart as well as to the back. Its better though that that secret was spilt, so you wont have that going on behind your back anymore, all those lies and worries, still, it's very sad though. Good write and good luck.
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This was a very heart-felt write. I'm sorry about everything you have gone through - I relate all too well. It hurts when the person you expected to be there through everything turns their back on you.
Great write and good luck
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well you are right that option fits there and you did a wonderful job of writing this piece...im so sorry about your friend...that is so wrong for somebody to do...i feel for you...thank you so much for entering and good luck in the contest!!
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My goodness, what a horrible thing to find out, not only that you have been betrayed by your hubby, but also by your so-called best friend, the two of them together. Such a sad situation. I truly can understand why you would now and probably forever have trust issues. You poor dear. The first thing that comes to mind is, what a *&^%@ you best friend is. Maybe that is not appropriate for me to say though. That is your decision to arrive upon. I wish you only the best with your future, and that you find healing.-Monica
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I took your advice and changed it hope you don't mind but you were right, it does fit better, thankyou!
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I'm guesssing the reason you did not give your name was the amount of contest you entered this in. Anyway, the storyline is tragic and does have great buildup. I'm not to fond of rhyming, but you brought it home nicely. One suggestion...What I found felt so unreal...it would sound better and you said this was a true story.
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yes it did really happen, unreal but so true.
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wow. really touching. did that really happen? I'm really sorry if it did. thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!
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this is a most tragic tragedy indeed the story is so real through your words as if it was me this happened to thats how well it is written i am very sorry your friend did this to you i can not imagine this kind of pain and betray one must feel you did an awesome job
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Boy does this strike a chord. Although it wasn't the same situation and not nearly as heart-wrenching as what you've experienced. Can I please hunt her down? Pretty please with a cherry on top? I was just looking at TeChNoWc's comment at how it built up and the was a slap in the face at what she did to you, and that's exactly what it feels like. Kudos to you for making the flow of the poem reflect what it's really like. An amazing honest write. good luck in your contest!
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Thanks for taking the time to review. It is a true story, yes. When it happened it was like a bolt out of the blue, sudden impact and thats what I was going for with this write. Glad it worked!
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Whoa
This poem totally spun me out. Is this a true story? I like how it suddenly just turned, no build up, just boom... Hit me like a ton of bricks, made me feel all the anger and justice my self... And I hardly ever get that. Wow. Great job... 'because I could' I felt pain reading those words. No arse kissing, this is a good poem.
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