Wings Surrendered

Before, my feet ached-
and wished for wings.
Then, smile fluttered.

In silence, I flew-
and travelled afar.

Tears blurred my eyes-
and numbed my heart.

Happiness is sometimes-
the product of pain. I knew that.

I once deem that flying
means forgetting.
I thought

Now,
I surrender my wings.

I need my feet back.
To walk the roads of my life
and have her back again.

A contest entry

Invite Only, part iv by Nicole Hanna. 5000 points, ended September 18, 2007, 4 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Prewrite me! ~~ One day only ~~ 500 points to Gold, will be judged tomorrow. by Naridill. 625 points, ended September 28, 2007, 145 entries
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Naridill
September 25, 2007

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I loved this, not sure completely why. It effected alot of the parts within me and held its comfort zone well. Beautiful picture, added alot within this piece.

vMuch luck
Hebz
September 21, 2007

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wow, very kool approach to how life is nice tho we didn't notice...

Penned very well, my fellow poet

Thnx for ur entry & Best of Luck

GloriousGift
Heba
Nicole Hanna
September 16, 2007
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I apologize for taking so long to comment on this. I loved the piece as a whole. The final stanza was something I could easily relate to on a very personal level. It wasn't something so generic that everyone could relate to, but still ... it resonated. The imagery was powerful. Thanks for entering.
naked roots
September 9, 2007

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I'm one that likes to have my cake, and eat it too.
I suppose, if I had a choice I'd like to have my feet and keep the wings...but life isn't always like that.
Nice metaphor usage
PageTurner
September 7, 2007

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You tell stories so well, my Friend...and there's always truth to be found within the lines, even when it's "just a poem". Very telling tale!

"Now,
I surrender my wings.

I need my feet back.
To walk the roads of my life
and have her back again."

~ Nicholas
maggiejamespoet
September 7, 2007

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Excellent poem based on the photo inspiration. Lines that I especially like are: "surrender my wings" and "flying means forgetting." This poem takes you to the word of the photograph and makes you feel what is is like in that girl's world. Good luck in the contest!