My heart is sadden and crying;
each tear a droplet of exploding atom.
No ocean can fully contain
the emotion of my soul.
Life’s ways often unpredictable:
assurances sometimes vanishing bubbles.
Dreams
Feelings
Visions
are captures of invisible knowing.
Crying smiles of closure
widens emptiness of soul.
Peace of eluding fulfilment...
Listen:
There is hope; there is outcome.
Continue in self’s journey: the
truth of tender’s knowing.
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Strompelende traan
My hart is huilend seer
elke traan ‘n ontplofende atoom.
Geen oseaan kan die emosie
van ‘n gekneesde siel opvang.
Die lewensweg soms onvoorspelbaar:
Drome
Gevoelens
Visioene
vasgevang in verdwene kennis.
Glimlag van helende trane
verbreed die siel se leegheid -
’n Onvervulde vrede…
Luister:
Daar’s hoop; daar’s uitkoms.
Bewandel die ontluikende weg: die
waarheid van begripvolle kennis.
Author notes
Compassion
In reponse to myrataal's poem: "Behind a Door in Garden Wall"
In a list
A contest entry
- Anything goes by crystallynnbradford.
565 points, ended September 19, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - In To Deep... by Daizy21.
850 points, ended December 8, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Is dit nie ironies hoe n mens soveel meer oor hartseer kan se as wat ons kan se van hoop...hierdie is pragtige woorde wat op n baie mooi manier aan een gesit is.
Dankie vir dit, en sterkte. -
This is such a beautiful piece you have written here.... pained but beautiful all the same... thanks for sharing
Karen -
A very interesting tale of a slivered heart. I know that one should never say that he or she has enjoyed such pain, but I will say that I have enjoyed the way that you were able to masterfully portray pain. Like joy, pain is also an emotion that has its importance in life. Without pain, can we truly say that we understand joy? We must understand the rain to appreciate the sun. I did enjoy this write, and thank you for sharing. Best wishes in the comp
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Excellent
Such powerful words. So full of truth. Best of luck in the contest.
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The One Sure Thing............
in life is change, be it heart break or not. But you have captured the essence of a heartbreak in this piece you have so eloquently penned here. It was full of sadness and disillusion and well it left me feeling sad for you. Great piece of poetry and written quite well in my book...Thanks for sharing!!!~~Toni~~
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The title is effective,every girl who ever had a broken heart will relate to the stumbled crying.Sadden/Saddened perhaps instead?Second stanza "captures of invisible knowing" doesn't gel any whichway,please do not take offence at my remark,I am English,I would have been beaten with an implement and stood in a corner if I had written that in school,then beaten again at home for being beaten at school,yet I understand there are different ways to communicate ache,and oh,how I know the weight of ache and appreciate that everyone that feels it's weight needs to express and exorcise it.
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Interesting title - not sure what to expect upon readig that. Liked the flow and the variance in line length - liked the ending as well. Think it should read my saddened soul.
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First I wanna say congradulations on your HM, and good luck in your next contest. I thought this was a pleasure to read. Very full of feeling. Keep up the great work.
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Great write
This has great insight and I liked it very much
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very nice...the emotion was brillant
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You are truly endopathic!
And a healer of great compassion ... I cherish this response ... Thank you so much, Frans, for knowing my soul.
I stand in awe at the way in which God linked us throughout these years in order to let these words appear today on a computer screen as solace and as token of divine care.
Baie dankie, liewe vriend!
Love
Myra
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